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Black hole eyes



One single look
Tearing the fabric
Of space and time
Looming destruction
Black hole eyes

A contest entry

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  • LostInTheDream
    February 15, 2008

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    Hmmm

    Yeah, since you use so little words, your title could help by being different from the last line... However, it is still an amazingly powerful write for using so little words! I like it!


  • The Kake Show
    February 15, 2008

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    i like this one its sad that your last line and your tital are the smar though it would be better if you said something with your title to add to the poem its only 15 words and you could really make it better by doing that


  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    wow!
    wonderful job, this is deff. short and powerful!
    best of luck in the contest =)
    stephanie


  • Your Angel Tears
    February 6, 2008
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    i really like this <3


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    February 6, 2008

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    This is great with some
    wonderful imagery here.
    Good luck to you with this
    one and thanks a lot for
    sharing it here!




    Jeremy0826

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