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Barren

Chocolate hair
Falls gently upon
Soft milky skin
Butterflies beckoning
Lost forgiveness
Amongst barren hope

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  • Megan Awesome
    February 18, 2008

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    I would probably understand this poem a little more if I could see the picture lol. But I don't have to see the picture to see taht this is a beautifully written poem. Great job.
    Megan


  • Rose Dark Thorn silver member
    February 6, 2008

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    I love the last three lines of this piece. It holds the most imagery and captivity there. Thank you for your entry.


  • LittleSis
    February 5, 2008
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    Haiku?

    makes me think of a Geisha..was this your intent?