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Sexual Playground

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You reach into the deepest recesses
touching the hidden corners of my mind
squeezing the life out of my heart
while tearing out the little child

I don't know when
I gave you permission,
to find your pleasure
in destroying who I am.

Somehow, I want it back;
turn the key,
lock the door,
shut myself away.

You slip in the cracks
taking that last piece of me
what's left is this empty shell
you see before you

I lose myself with you
with you there is no me
I'm empty with you
I'm empty without you

Your chains bind me to your world
of happiness and personal pain
My heart drags heavy
Under your lock and key

I can't escape this addiction
Your torture is my pleasure
Your pleasure is my torture
Let me make you happy

Let me love you
Let me love
Let me
Let




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  • hotchocolate gold member
    October 7
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    WOW! I know alot of people can relate to this write! This was written so well that I enjoyed reading

    Your chains bind me to your world
    of happiness and personal pain
    My heart drags heavy
    Under your lock and key


  • Rheea gold member
    August 2

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    I personally just do not like the subject matter. I like men to be men and women to be women. The style is good you write well.

  • SoulfulBubbles
    July 26

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    "I don't know when
    I gave you permission,
    to find your pleasure
    in destroying who I am."


    I really relate to this, the emotions, the feeling
    i liked this,i liked how they came across , very precise
    and clear, as it hit my heart door with a familiar tap

    thank you


    -Kas K bubbles


  • Poetryintheblood
    May 2
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    Thank you for your entry, Josie

  • mysticstorm gold member
    April 18

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    This is very well written...so much underling meaning...why is it we so easily in life get addicted to the things we so love to hate...or better yet the people who break us the most are the ones we cling to...nicely erotic in darkness...not easy to do but you did it well...excellent work in flow and meter...perfect ending...
    Best to you...
    and congrat's on the Gold!


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    April 15

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    damn I loved the hell out of this. It hits close to home and you just nailed the thoughts in my mind. Read some of my vents too


  • passionate-poet
    April 10

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    congrats on your awards but this poem seems so sad to me like some kind of underlining abuse or for lack of better word sadness about your sexuality like someone forced it on you and took it from you or robbed something personal from who you were or the enjoyment of it im not really sure. as if you were degraded by the act of enjoying being sexual. not quite sure im reading into it right but thats what i got from it. very intense poem, thank you for sharing it.


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    February 29
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    A wonderful poem..so powerful! I have read this over and over again!

    Charishma

  • Charley-
    February 14

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    Hello and thanks for entering my contest i thought your piece was very emotional and i like how it show's alot of love


  • Midnight-x-Rose
    February 14

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    I like how you managed to cross love, with erotica and dark, sometimes its hard to do that without making it sound scary or grotesque, but you managed to do this well.

  • paullallady silver member
    February 13

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    This is a very emotional piece of poetry,
    obviously about love and yet there is such
    a sadness and almost a pained feeling. good
    luck in the contest.
  • The Inc
    February 10

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    The "back and forth" is obvious and
    fits well with your intended theme. Thanks
    for entering.

    ~The INC."

  • Ephiphany gold member
    February 9
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    Interesting write you have penned here

    I loved the flow as well.
    Congrats on the trophy and thanks for sharing.
    Ephiphany♥


  • Riftkin gold member
    February 7

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    your emotions pour on this one

    love how it unwinds at the end
    with the words just going away
    little by little
    till you see that there is nothing left


    • Dark Otter gold member
      February 10

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      Appreciation

      To be noticed by someone I respect. Thank you for this opportunity. Thank you for your acknowledgment. (and thanks for my first points)

  • Mirandalicious
    February 6

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    wow this was amazing and you wrote it very good. it shows alot of emotion and that is just what i wanted.
    thank you for entering and good luck

    • Dark Otter gold member
      February 10
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      Appreciation and humility

      is what I feel. A female poet said that a particular piece of mine 'lacked passion.' So I bled on this one. It's a honest gut effort. Thank you for recognizing that
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