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Wasted Tragedy (I Love You)

[Verse (1)]
She's afraid of monsters that no one can see,
And yet they still terrify me.
Her cries in the night send shivers down my spine.
And I start to feel them there too...
Watching me.
She bleeds from wounds that only she can see,
And bloodshot eyes dare me to see them.
So crimson, how does the blood run down her face?
There's nothing there; there's nothing there...
Watching her.

[Chorus]
My love, this is all a wasted tragedy.
And my darling, I already know that you hate me.
But please don't cry, I'll hold you tight.
Please don't cry, and you'll make it through the night.
How can you say, that I never really cared?
When all along, I was the only one ever there?
But please don't die, I'll never let you go.
Please don't die, you're all I've ever had to hold.

[Verse (2)]
She talks to the walls and listens to the rain,
And I'm starting to hear both sides of the conversation.
You wouldn't believe all the things that they've said.
And they're always telling lies...
Telling her lies.
She's afraid of the light; she's afraid of the dark,
And every step leads us back to the start.
And it never matters how tight I hold onto her.
They're always there; they're always there...
Watching us.

[Repeat Chorus]

[Verse (3)]
How can she be so beautifully insane?
And how can she carry on this way?
Some days, she can't even remember my name...
And some days, some days it'll never be the same.
There's darkness deep inside of her.
And I watch it slowly devour her.
Soft blue eyes that cannot see.
Her soft blue eyes see right through me.
How can she be so perfectly broken?
And how can she hear all the words unspoken?
Some days, all my love is forgotten...
And some days, some days she leaves me the broken hearted.

[Verse (4)]
I'm afraid of the monsters lurking beneath my bed,
And she whispers there's nothing there.
But I can hear the murmurs keeping me up all night.
And I can feel them so close...
Watching me.
She kisses my forehead and turns out the light,
Closes the door and leaves me behind.
Why can't I remember why I ever lost my mind?
But they're always there; they're always there...
Watching me!

[Repeat Chorus x2]

[Closing]
And I love you...

Author notes

{ I hope this can apply to Option 2, "Write about someone you really care about and a tough time they have been going through". "Sweet." xD }

~ Lyccea.

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  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    This is an amazing piece that you have done here thank you for taking the time to enter the contest best wishes and much luck


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    February 8, 2008

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    Welcome to allpoetry

    Very dark and sad. Who was really the one with the insanity, as it is I am left wondering if she was the one broken or the narrator. This also kind of reminds me of Beautiful Disaster. Nice flow and structure.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy
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    • Lyccea
      February 8, 2008
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      *bows slightly*

      T'is what you're supposed to be wondering in the end! =D

      >.>;

      Thank you very much! :3

      <3


  • DAMSELx
    February 8, 2008

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    Wow, this is amazing....
    I really wish I could hear music to this
    Verse 3 is definitely my favorite!
    I loved every minute of this!

    Best of luck,
    --DAMSELx


  • a-face-in-the-crowd
    February 7, 2008

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    Wow

    This is excellent! I loved the role reversal at the end. Some of the lines were fantastic "How can she be so perfectly broken?" I really liked the juxtapositioning of perfectly and broken.
    Thanks for entering my contest!
    x


  • Hated.
    February 6, 2008
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    wow thatss aweosme and congrats ^.^


    • Lyccea
      February 7, 2008
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      Z'oh my gosh, thank you so much. <333


  • Corijoface
    February 5, 2008
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    kickass

    its really great
    keep writing stuff like that youll go far


  • Dutch Doll
    February 5, 2008

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    This is really interesting... creative... kept my attention the whole way though,
    welcome to ap

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