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Sonneteering 101 (Sonnet #66)

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The sonnet sounds are such that all can hear

The velvet rhythms that the words create.

Those bard created words that touch the ear

Oft also reach a heart and resonate.

The fourteen lines created with such care,

And gently rhymed to bring the reader joy,

May oft surprise and catch him unaware,

And if well done could prejudice destroy.

For many feel that rhyme should fade away,

Its usefulness a thing of bygone time.

If Shakespeare were to be alive today,

His sonnets all ignored because they rhyme.

But I for one have chose the rhyming word,

Their out-of-hand rejection is absurd.

Author notes

Written by kirbysman

This follows the form of a Shakespearean sonnet and the iambic pentameter is fairly rigid, if not perfect.

Each line consists of ten syllables, 5 iambs, an iamb being a poetic foot with an unaccented syllable followed by an accented syllable.

The rhyming is the standard abab cdcd efef gg with the closing couplet summing up the rest of the poem.

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  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Love it! Your last 2 lines said it all! I wholeheartedly agree O love reading good rhyme and yours is excellent
    Congratulations on your trophy and bravo for writing this and the topic
    Gaylene


  • catz Moderators member
    November 24, 2008

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    Shakespear certainly had a mind of his own when it came to writing and his Sonnets are not exceptioned.
    You did a very nice job with this one and I see it even won a well deserved Silver trophy



    Dee


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    Shakespearean literature is something I have yet to see duplicated and I doubt ever will. Truly a classic


  • suseann
    November 24, 2008
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    Excellence of the Master's rime woven within this exemplary Sonnet divine. If he were alive still today. He'd listen,admire a new wave free verse. Then attempt to instruct on the structured talent it takes to manifest a good sonnet,such as we are gifted with here.


  • rbruce gold member
    November 24, 2008

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    Very good indeed. Its my lucky day today, twice in a few hours I have found a sonnet that is musical when read aloud.Shakespeare and co had the advantage of a more musical language than modern English in which to write, so it is an achievement of some note to emulate the bard with todays language. Congratulations for a teriffic sonnet.


  • anaisnais
    February 7, 2008
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    Nicely done, love the rhyme, not as easy as it first looks. Congrats on getting silver! Last but one line - should read chosen?


  • Ishtar
    February 7, 2008

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    I'm not even going to say it because you already know it!

    GUHUAjkuydsghfjiouygfhjkliuaytfgcvbsnmk AKA jealous.

    That's all.
    [[remembers she owes you a sonnet]]
    askjdiuagshdoiuyghjkalsiouygdh AKA death.

    muah!


  • micol
    February 6, 2008

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    One quibble--grammatically, "have chose" needs to be "have chosen"; but that far into such a smoothly iambic piece, with the rhythm so firmly established, a single anapestic substitution isn't going to make a bit of difference. Otherwise, a smoothly crafted, gentle sonnet worthy of its tradition.

    • ecrivain01
      February 7, 2008
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      Yes ...

      that "have chose" drove me nuts, but since it was in a contest, I held my tongue. The inverted line bothered me too, but it wasn't my contest so I didn't say anything. I do think it's a clever way to give instruction on writing sonnets and that's basically what was called for here.

  • suseann
    February 6, 2008
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    How clever is this! Very, to have composed such an outstanding sonnet ,about the sonnet! Ha! I love this.And your expressing the method in composing one is first rate too.I'm afraid I my self have a hard time wrapping my brain around the 5 iambs concept.Obviously I'll need more exampled instructions before it sinks in I suppose.Not meaning such isn't there in this great piece. Just my ear isn't atuned to capture it. By no means any short coming emplied concerning your structure or abilities. It's just me, and very frustrating.I'll keep your author's instructions saved with your permission because they are descript.Once again, this is a fantastic joy to read.Best of luck in the contest and thank you for the astute instructions.
    P.S.,As an after thought. I'd forgotten to mention/remind you of your name being a required inclusion in the contest rules. I'm sure it was an oversight.If you would please?

  • ecrivain01
    February 6, 2008
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    Yes ...

    very nicely done.

  • ecrivain01
    February 6, 2008
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    Yes ...

    very nicely done.


  • masterblaster gold member
    February 5, 2008

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    Hi, nice one, most people sneer at rhyme because they cannot write it and as for meter they would not know it, even if it slapped them round the mouth,lol, enjoyed this sonnet very much, all the best in the comp, Di

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