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S.O.S

I call out for someone to save me
But I don't think they can hear me
My signals go unnoticed,
I'm alone.
This room is getting bland
With no knew faces coming in
The door is locked,
And I'm alone.
I'm not sure what to do,
Maybe if you knew what I felt
Maybe you could help me, save me.
Are you listening to my prayers?
Are you listening to my screams at night?
Do you understand that I need you more than I needed you yesterday-
I've tried harder than hell to get your attention
To let you know that I'm slipping under
Unsure of what to do
I wonder if my S.O.S will ever be noticed

Holding onto this raft,
I'm reaching out for God's hand
But my fingers slip away-
The cold night air suffocates my lungs
I know I can't make it on my own
I need your help
If only you could hear me
I know you would save me from this nightmare

So where is my voice,
Why can't you hear my calls for help?

"Is anybody listening?
Can you hear me when I call?
I'm shooting signals in the air
Cuz I need somebody's help"

This song is on repeat
Because I'm desperate for your help
So before the song ends,
Grab for my hand-
I'm calling...
You're not answering.
As the song starts again,
I'm so alone.
I can't make it on my own,
And the power just went out...

Author notes

Option 1
Poem inspired by Good Charlotte's song title//song: "S.O.S"

Okay this is what I first wrote:
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Slipping under, so distressed
I'm unsure of what I'm capable of
Can I make it through the night
Or will I die a horrible death...
I'm putting out an S.O.S
Hoping, and praying, that someone can save me
Because lately, I'm not sure if I can save myself
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But I decided to work on it some more, and hopefully I didn't make the song sound disgusting, lol. Well hope you enjoy!

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  • xXxIceQueenxXx
    February 11

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    whoa....that last stanza kind of took me by surprise.

    As much as I do like the last stanza, I don't see how it works into the poem?

    Did you have an episode? I guess it's more the last line:

    "and then the power went out...." don't know if you meant it to be, but I found it rather comical.


    • brittany.geeze
      February 11

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      oh btw Liz.
      You suck.
      I caught a spelling error.
      "knew faces" was supposed to be "new faces"
      thanks for letting me know!
      gahhhhd.
      and yeah i did have an episode.
      im always having episodes.
      i think i was going for comical,, well not quite comical, but close enough.


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    August 22, 2008

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    It is such a horrible thing to feel so alone. Screaming for help with no answer is damning. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Mad As Rabbits
    February 7, 2008
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    I like this. It goes well with the song and I absolutely love that song, it's one of my favs. You did it justice, just in case you were worried . It was a bit more telling than showing but it seemed to fit for this song. I really enjoyed this!

    Thanks for entering.

    Love Always,

    Caroline

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