Disconnected, disreguarded
Lost among the shadows.
Disappointing, disapproved of
Gaining little faith.
Unattentive, unrepentant
Looked down upon by gods.
Uninspired, unimportant
Lost without a faith.
Weakened scripture, weakened life
Not good enough for breath.
Weakened mind, weakened will
Hunting for a faith.
Misintended, misexplained
Dying for a hope.
Misappointed, misdeveloped
Praying for a faith.
Disillusioned, disrepaired
Fallen into black.
Disrespected, disempowered
Now hiding from all faiths.
Author notes
This is about a person that's disrespected by people and think they're all the other words I said. They look for faith to try to help them, but once they discover that it can't help them, they give up completely. I hope that's what all of you got out of it at least.
I got the title of the poem from the Lacuna Coil song Fragments of Faith.
ShadedRequiem. Or I could be you Grandma. 
LOL, or worse, Both!!!
A contest entry
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Superb! What an utterly thought prevoking write, I think you've done an excellent job on the subject you were putting forth. I love the way you end each stanza and I think my favourite part of this poem is:
"Unattentive, unrepentant
Looked down upon by gods.
Uninspired, unimportant
Lost without a faith."
^simply marvelous!
Thank you so much for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,
Luck.
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Disrespected, disempowered
Now hiding from all faiths.
I like this last line here, it really seemed to stand out from the rest of the poem. Excellent choice of title, love the song from Lacuna Coil as well.
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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I thought this was absolutely lovely The alliteration worked to enhance the poem and didn't seem forced at all.
Thank you -
I'm impressed by the structure of this and certainly by the content as well. Such dispair. That is what it's like sometimes.
Keep the faith.
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I liked this piece...especially the way in which you discussed faith at the end of each stanza, and it progressed from having little faith to hiding from it completely. (I also like the title
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The idea that faith can't help one find some solace from the pain is sad, but I've been there before (luckily not for long). You did a wondeful job of expressing the pain of that experience.
I really enjoyed this read. Thanks for entering!
Cheers,
S
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