Locked inside
With only one way out
Trapped,with everything to hide
I sit here, day after day.
I feel no one could know my pain.
My mother and I were best friends
Until middle school, where the relationship ended
Not because i was too cool
Or because I was ashamed
But because my own mother
Would never accept my change
A girl walked into my life
Long auburn hair
And the beautifulest blue eyes
I quickly knew,
She had to be mine.
Her soft,pale skin.
Called to me day after day
But to let anyone know
What i felt.
I was feverishly ashamed.
Soon it became clear
I wasn't normal.
I didn't like boys.
I wanted my girl.
Mom's a heavy Christian.
She severely dislikes the Gays
She told me if i was ever like "that"
She'd kick me out,and forget me for the rest of my days.
Unable to let go
The secrets deep within me
Stuck in this hole
Lies that consume constantly
I sit here, day after day.
I feel no one could know my pain.
Locked inside
With only one way out
Trapped,with everything to hide
Author notes
Eh, I just wrote it, i'm sorry. It's really all i could think of..it's how i feel..It's kind of a mixture of 2 and 8.
A contest entry
- LGBT History Month (Feb. 2008) by Laura-Critchley.
850 points, ended February 23, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Our Poor Teenage Hearts by PonyPride.
950 points, ended April 21, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thoughts?
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Alright, I'm judging this as one of the finalist so I have to be strict and focused on the litary portion of the poem. Though I really like this one, mostly for its unique structure, it did not have that perfect ryhme sceem I was looking for, however it was very true and clear. It told your story through poetry, whcih is exactly what I asked for. Good job, and best of luck.
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This is nice. I kinda understand what your talking about in it but thats also cause I'm Melly I know stuff, but, not everything. I Know about your mom and now you feel a lot better cause of the weekend.
The thing is not just you go through this there are lots out there, not trying to be mean, it seems like a lot are afraid of what people will say mostly their parents.
"I sit here, day after day.
I feel no one could know my pain"
This part calls out to me it reaches this piece inside me that only certain people know. It may not be about the same problem but I have almost the same pain.
This seemed like a wonderful poem of yours. You have written better which of course you know. I love the Simplicity if this poem, how i understand what your talking about.
~Melly!
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Thats just wonderful, its gutting that you have to go through this, my friend went through this with her mum because she had a girlfriend.....shes gotten over it now, i hope your mother does too.
Nice write.
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I really like this. It shows a pain that many teenagers face, but it was personal. I could feel your pain and sorrow, for a "problem" that you did ask for. Actually, I dont find it a problem at all but perhaps some are blinded. If she is such a heavy christian does she not beleive that Lord loves us all and actually created us. I dont beleive he would create a type of person to hate. I dont find god to be a hater.
As your poem it was uniquely formed, and it had a lot of flow. It was in a typical Abab or such order but it was beautiful. I will be adding this to the finalists and will then again look at the poem more closely. -
I like this one. It is hard to come out. I know it was a struggle for me. This is just nicely done. I really enjoyed this. Keep it up.
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Coming out to parent's is one of the hardest things a person could do; especially if you still live with them and are reliant on them.
So many people end up homeless, friendless... with nowhere and noone left to turn to after they've come out and become true to themselves. It's why I volunteer at an LGBT youth group.
The repetition worked so perfecetly; it was almost trying to emphasise your pain and the sense of entrapment.
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Wow I can relate to this one. But instead of mom it was my dad. So this is so true. I am deeply moved by this one. Thanks so much for the read and keep it up!
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I enjoyed it, and I really felt for you, since I don't know what I'd do without my mommy, if in your shoes.
Coming out takes a lot of courage, and I don't see why any parent would abandon their child, in their greatest moment of need. Personally, I will be proud of my future son or daughter for taking such a step, since honesty will only solidify any relationship. Thank you for your entry, and best of luck in the contest. If you need to talk to someone, I am here for you.
Laura
xxx
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