Barbie Feud

Ken asked Barbie on a date today
He said nervously "So what do you say"?
"Of course!" Barbie squeaked
She put makeup on with stylish technique

She changed her shiny clothes in a second

That's cause I was changing her I reckoned

The doorbell had rung

Barbie had sung.

She was ready for her big happy chance.

Ken had took Barbie to the prom dance.

Suddenly while the music was playing,

there was a big girly voice saying

"Barbie meet your doom "

A hand came through the room

It took Barbie in my bathroom sink.

The water was on(her clothes were pink)

But it turned white and Barbie was dead

I wonder what Ken did instead?

The End

Author notes

I am 10 years old! You never know what you can do if you play with a barbie doll! he he

My user name is Longlife

A contest entry

My Beautiful Doll ... A contest for kids up to age...???? by Periwinkle Blue. 550 points, ended February 8, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Round #1 (enter away) by takemypainaway. 390 points, ended March 22, 2008, 52 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Number-1-Popcorn-Fan
June 4, 2008
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Nice Job!
Slick99
June 3, 2008

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POOR BARBIE.....
poor barbie..... she croaked.. LOL.. good job.. why did you call it BARBIE FEUD?? just wondering.. -slick99
- longlife
  June 3, 2008
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  Im not sure why I named it BArbie Feud, really just it was barbie comotian and crazy things happening. Im not real good at making titels for poems
takemypainaway
March 11, 2008

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very nice poem i love this

i wish i wrote like this when i was 10 great write

althogh this is your LAST CHANCE FOR USERNAME>>>

thank you for entering!!

**kat
- longlife
  March 12, 2008
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  longlife! its in my author notes now,sry
Sky Prince Ireland
March 11, 2008
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Good poem but I'm afraid this will not do for my contest. It's supposed to be about your favorite toy and what it mean(meant) to you. This I don't think falls under that. And yes I consider this adult. Not appropriate for the other kids in my contest to read.
Sorry. But you're welcome to enter something else.
Brian
takemypainaway
March 9, 2008
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username please*
- longlife
  March 12, 2008
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  Ok i got my user name in my author notes.
  -longlife
- longlife
  March 10, 2008
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  oh yes,sorry about that.I put it in there
Peppermint star xxx
February 7, 2008

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The rhyme seemed a little forced in some parts,put it still worked out quite nicely So....you...killed Barbie while she was at the prom with Ken? Woah....talk about JEALOUSY! lol,i'm just kidding.Good job.
Periwinkle Blue
February 5, 2008
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Oh, I am so delighted with this poem, you have no idea! I LOVE playing with dolls and could see you doing this in my mind. The part about the bathroom sink is perfect. VERY FINE! BRAVO!
- longlife
  March 10, 2008
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  thanks so much!!!!! You sure know a lot of smiley's he he!