Long ago in a far away land
A mistake was made it wasn’t planned
The mistakes parents didn’t know to wear protection
All they showed the mistake was rejection
The mistake grew into a helpless child
That very rarely smiled
The child didn’t know much love
The hate she was shown she didn’t know how to rise above.
The child was young
She didn’t know what she did wrong
To make people so mad
This just made her really sad.
Everyday she would be abused
The young child was so confused
Everyday she would try to hide
In the tool shed outside
When she was a little older
Life grew slightly colder
Towards her, when she started school
People bullied her because they thought she was uncool.
Each day she would be abused
At home and school, her whole body was swollen and bruised
At night she would silently cry
While wishing she could just curl up and die.
True as it was, this girl was no more than seven
And she already wished she lived up in heaven
It’s very sad when a child wishes nothing more than to die
It’s like no one can hear them shout out for attention when they cry.
The child cried many tears
While still trying to fight her fears
She felt that her life was shit
Everyday she was kicked and hit.
At the age of eight
She was so full of hate
For her life, and everyone in it
They didn’t give a shit
She took a knife from the kitchen drawer
She went to her room and sat on the floor
She stared at it, very confused
She slowly slide the knife down her arm, straight away blood oozed
She was a little shocked at what she did
She ran to the bathroom and hid
She wrapped up the cut
And hid the knife in a tin and locked it shut
On her tenth birthday
She was beaten in a bad way
It had been two years since she had opened the box with the knife
She was so fed up with life that she had a lot of strife
She lay there shaking and bleeding
Her heart rate was speeding
She cut her arm, long and deep
It didn’t take long before the blood began to seep
She cut deep
The blood and tears began to seep
She lay there crying
She was slowly dying
She slowly began to slip into a deep sleep
She had finally cut to deep
She began to shake
Lying there in her blood lake
She picked up her phone
And she rung home
She sighed
When her mom answered the phone, a small part of her died
“You did this to me
I used to love you
But you hated me, now I hate you to
You couldn’t even see
When you killed me…”
The woman on the phone didn’t know what to say
She just replied with “No way”
The phone went dead
Just as that was said
The young child was dead
This was the last thing said
By the mother
Now all that’s left of this family is the new baby brother
Author notes
just random really. I didn't write this poem to express my abuse cause I haven't been abused
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Omg; this poem remided me of something that has happened in my life(: i really liked it!
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This is so sad and heart breaking. I have 3 children all grown and I hate the thought of any child being mistreated. Such an explicit message. God bless.
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wow... AMAZING
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"She slowly began to slip into a deep sleep
She had finally cut to deep
She began to shake
Lying there in her blood lake
She picked up her phone
And she rung home
She sighed
When her mom answered the phone, a small part of her died
“You did this to me
I used to love you
But you hated me, now I hate you to
You couldn’t even see
When you killed me…”
The woman on the phone didn’t know what to say
She just replied with “No way”
The phone went dead
Just as that was said
The young child was dead
This was the last thing said
By the mother
Now all that’s left of this family is the new baby brother "
This I feel in every way. I wasn't abused thanks to my grandmother but my mother did throw me away. She didn't want me so my grandparents raised me for this I feel blessed. These stanzas I feel the most. I too am a cutter for similar reasons but not exactly one day if I continue to cut I will cut to deep and then perhaps this hell will leave me too.
*hugs the child* This I give to the child in this story for they all should be loved not hated mistake or not wanted or not they deserve love. -
this is a good write. At first it reminded me of concrete angel. But then it started to get darker. Great write and keep it up.
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Wow What An Amazing poem i love it
this is a gr8 write i love it keep up the good work u have a gr8 talent li hope you go far its awonderful poem i love it
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This is wonderful. I felt this poem very well. You've done a great job with the rhyme and the story behind is great. Thank you for making the finalist list and entering the contest. Best of luck to you. Kahy
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This is really touching. Quite a few errors, but really well written
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Author notes....false(?)
I'd still blow up the world for you, if you take the blame.
Hope you email me back sometime, just so I can hear from ya little cuz.
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Child abuse is a terrible thing in any of its forms. I've written a couple of poems dealing with child abuse. (Mommy) And (Leftovers) Sad story you've written here random or not.
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WOW!!!
Wow this is a really touching poem. You did a really great job on it. It was very deep and emotional. I could feel the knife slice across my arm and the pain the child was going through. Very well done. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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oh my this is amazing. It's so sad and almost made me cry. Its sad that this happens to kids. You did a great job of showing the childs emotion. I really liked this. ^.^
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Tres Bien Crée
Written with emotion and written well. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme, mostly. However, try to avoid re-using the same words when trying to rhyme.
These are powerful words that are wielded with power and precision.
Bien fait. -
oh wow this was an amzing poem i loved it a lot.. i could feel all the emotion running through it. well more like it screamed at me from the page! anyways it was awesome!
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aww i really like this poem, very touching to the soul. Did the family even care that she was dead? Omg! Well done!
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omg... that was amazing... i love the way you wrote that... you are an amazing poet!
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This makes me really sad.
too many times have i seen such things. Its heart breaking. Well written sweetie. 
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