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image: of daily resurrections

 
 
 
last night the dead bird flew.
 
a feather scribed sigils
into palms,
into surfaces too weary to hold
a broken moon
but tender enough to push
the sky back.
 
that dreaming quill wrote my future
the same as yours
                 [ at the end at least ]
 
but I do not fear that quiet

empty echo

 

for every witness to death
becomes a mirror.
 
 
 
every morning I listen to my image-
noise folds neatly into silence

and silence into noise.
 
an absence of sound falls
everywhere and anywhere but there.
 
but here also.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Cat gold member
    February 18

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    there are some really good images in here- i think you get a bit bogged down in your wording so the images get a bit lost-
    you seem to want to say it all and forget the reader can fill in the blanks..

    but that said.. some wonderful images too

    m

  • nearlycivilized
    February 10

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    I always love your writing my favourite lines -
    "for every witness to death
    becomes a mirror."
    It's such an interesting thought.

  • naked roots
    February 7

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    brilliant stuff here...
    Those ending six lines were a great finish. I know the absense of sound. Sometimes it can be louder than any noise.
    excellent.


  • Rowan gold member
    February 6

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    that second stanza literally took my breath away, brilliant alliteration, and thoughts in this poem kate.
    You are nothing short of amazing.


  • Fug-azi
    February 6
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    Just awe .. nothing else comes close


  • NurseChilly gold member
    February 6

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    quite sad and sorrowful yet has a place of unfolding and awakenings?

    the slow breath of hunger
    here also........ it comes

    nice to see you writing Kate



    miss ya Sis

    Gilly.x

  • Lovely


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 5

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    {awed silence}


  • ardentMarch gold member
    February 5
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  • misselaineous gold member
    February 5
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    such lovely sounds in that first stanza
    such a good poem
    achey
    and clear


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    February 5

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    Love the last 6 lines..Felt like I could see an image folding in on itself and finally settling on something between the two. Balance.

    Wonderful balance, even with the bit of quiet sadness here. I love the hands pushing the sky back..



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