• My closet became a shelter
When things begin to swelter
That’s where I’ve been hiding
The place where I was residing
When our house went upside down
Hiding behind my black gown
• It’s been years now
I slip inside I know not how
But I run from daddy every night
I try to disappear from his eyesight
For he comes home in fury
Trying to get his hands all over me
• I sit inside in the dark
My legs bent and arc
I weep secretly closing my mouth
So no shrieks would come out
But daddy knows where I be
And eventually gets his hands all over me
• Dragging me out from my hair
Slamming my head here and there
The then takes of his leather belt
Harshly he goes to pelt
I cry of pain and he goes intense
He even loses his sanity and sense
• I wish my closet had a lock
So inside he never broke
I wish it was big enough for two
So I could have called in mommy too
I lost my new coming brother for that
For daddy battered mommy with a baseball bat
Author notes
[4]Make me cry. Write me something so moving that I can not stop the tears.
A contest entry
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Comments
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This is horrible... I don't know how anyone could do these things to another human being, all I know is these types make me sick and angry so much I could physically be sick.
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whoah. This was really hard to read. I hope you didn't write this from any kind of personal experience. Thanks for entering.
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This is very very sad. Well written but sad. Thank you for your entry. Best of luck in the contest.
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awww..... this is so terrible sad... but so well written.. It really bleeds emotion throughout the whole piece. This really deserves the gold trophies that you got for them... I do think that it wasn't finished though... it ended quite abruptly... I don't know may be thats just me.
Thank you so much for entering and participating in my contest and good luck,
~lumin
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.....I don't know what I can say about this poem. It brought me to tears. You made me feel so deeply and you captured me with her words. SIMPLY AMAZING job, thanks for entering and good luck.
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I soooooooo feel this poem and the pain, and I do understand this more than I would have liked...have lived through much of this...
congrats to you on the gold, 
s and blessings ~Trisha
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Gosh...what a powerful write! Very moving and very heartbreaking.
Congratulations on the Gold!
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OMG! This is so painful to read! If this is true, all I want to do is hold you and comfort you. You have raised the bar on the dark genre.
Love,
Amera♥
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Awesome! just awesome !! ...
so touchy ..
loved every bit of it ..
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Omg
omg bro...u did not tell me about this! Great job on this write it was very expressive! I love how u told it like a story from a lil boy's point of veiw! great write!
Missy
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sissssssss thanks for your sweeet comment i really cried while writing htis its heartache for me
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• I wish my closet had a lock
So inside he never broke
I wish it was big enough for two
So I could have called in mommy too
I lost my new coming brother for that
For daddy battered mommy with a baseball bat
I love this, It is so sad
Sometimes a poem just makes you sad, this was one of those
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"Dragging me out from my hair
Slamming my head here and there
The then takes of his leather belt
Harshly he goes to pelt
I cry of pain and he goes intense
He even loses his sanity and sense" this paragraph i can really relate too, i often hide in my closet its like the place where you feel enclosed and safe, covered by the darkness, i love the way you made this flow so beautifully, this is an excellent poem.
Take care,
Emily
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