Warriors of all races, unite,
against the horde of beasts
raping, pillaging our villages,
hate gleaming in their eyes,
angry teeth, swords and axes
moving through flesh like air,
murdering innocent people,
even those asleep in their bed,
revenge those innocent souls!
Fight each monster and beast,
and fear not the undead men,
nothing can stop you if you
take your sword and fight
against the injustice with
sword in your clenched hands,
yelling for sweet revenge.
© Jim T. Henriksen
October 21st, 2005
Author notes
This is inspired by a Warhammer Fantasy RPG, and a repost of a poem I wrote under an alias here in AllPoetry. The poem is an acrostic, read the first letter in each line.
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great Acrostic
enter this into a contest, looks like a winner
good luck
Linda
love the way you used words in this piece, I hope you
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WOW
thats sweet
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Thanks
for the comment and the applauses, I appreciate it. But "sweet"?
Jim
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wow
This is totally pikadelic reminds me of the struggles i have hauling it overboard. Well done it reminds me why wow should be left deleted on my comp. Thanks for sharing -
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I can not deny, the original RPG is pulling hard in me, calling me to gather with friends around a table, or go into the character in person in a live game, but I do not have so much time for it anymore. Work is taking up most of my time, and in the weekends I need to rest. It happens that I promise to visit old friends, but unfortunately it is difficult to do it. Also, traveling cost money, and the bills are stacking high. So I fall back to the only kind of RPG that I can still do, via computer games, and ofcourse via poetry, which I believe is the ORIGINAL role playing game.
Thanks for your comment, I appreciate it a lot! Jim
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Wow! Very vivid! Your descriptions are fantastic and very raw... Loved the "moving through flesh like air" - your use of imaginative writing is unique and astounding.
I liked the "sweet revenge" at the end... which is paradoxical with the rest of the poem... A very effective final line.
I hadn't noticed at first it was an acrostic... Then I went "wow". How can it be so fluid when every line had to start by a certain letter?
thanks for sharing this
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Ofcourse writing an acrostic free verse (as this would be) is hard, because you have to both keep the acrostic, and at the same time make it flow natural as free verse does. I liked the line about moving through flesh too, when I read over it after it was done. When I write poems, I just write what comes to mind, then go back and look it over, to search for flaws, etc. Often I see that I have written something very deep. Maybe it is my unconscious mind that does this, or maybe it is my muse? Thanks for the comment, and the applauses, it means a lot to me! Jim
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Not sure if it's your mind or your muse... Maybe both together. But I'd say talent basically. I really admire your work, it's spontaneous and indeed very deep at the same time. keep it up!!!
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What I read here...I thought was an awesome write! I'm not to familiar with Acrostic....I haven't wrote much in that form...but your wording reminds me of Medieval times for some reason and that is what "I" got from it.
There are alot of different forms I would like to try and write...I just haven't lately had time to do it. I've only had time for "Free Verse"....which is what I perfer....but I would like to try something different in the future.
Anyways....I really enjoyed reading this!
debbie
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Indeed,
it could easily have been in medieval times, back when superstition was ruling the folklore, and werewolfs, ghosts, ghouls and other monsters were seen everywhere. But this is set in a fantasy world called "Warhammer", where werewolfs etc. really exist. The trick with role play games is to live into the story, and the more go enter the game world, and the way of thinking as your hero would have, the better you are in playing. Needless to say, I do it well. You should really try to write acrostics, it is very fun. Some write rhyming acrostics, but I decided to run an unrhyming one here. Most acrostics makes no sense if read as a complete statement, but this would only make sense if read as a whole... You could say that acrostics are the child of free verse and form poetry. 
Thanks for your comment, and for your kind applause. Please check other of my new poems too. Jim
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Wicked Jim, lots of imagery springs to mind and you've definitely achieved your aim of writing a great non-rhyming acrostic. A pleasure to read, well done!
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Hi, Roz!
Well, I guess I tried to make an acrostic that would seem to be so real it could easily not be a poem. I have seen many acrostic that makes absolutely no sense, only random seperate lines with no coherent thread running through it... That kind of poetry makes me shiver down my spine. Thanks for the comment, and the applause, I am so glad you are back! Jim
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oh ok Jim you did a good detailed description in this piece,no matter what you do, you give it thought, lol good luck Bro...
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Hi, Linda...
This was as mentioned in the notes a poem reposted from an alias here on AP, it was written over two years ago, and I did a small edit on it after you visited to comment, but overall it is the same, just minor cosmetic fixes. I guess I tried to see if I could make a good acrostic without rhymes, as you know I am a sucker for rhyming poetry. Thanks for commenting, and for your applauses I bow deeply. 
Jim
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