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image: burnt offerings and superstition

 

 

 

 

 
the dead bird sang.
 

 
palming notes
as lightly as an open grave
holds grief,
 
we read etched lines

as circles.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

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  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    February 6
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    just...really good and clever writing.


  • Naridill gold member
    February 6

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    I love this - it's careful but intense. The beauty and simplicity but the fluent carvings in the mind.

    We thank you for putting up with us till the end and for coming back time again.

  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    February 6

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    You bring him/her to life with your words here. Love the take on the prompt. This is wonderfully done.




  • ardentMarch gold member
    February 5

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    I like these dead bird series..the 'dead bird' is not really dead to me at all...I like how you give it life..


  • Night Hope gold member
    February 5

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    Dammmnnn. That middle stanza especially. Critique WHAT, pray tell??? Good luck in the contest, my Friend. Wanda

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