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Forever

You always come to me for help

 

For my thoughts are yours forever

 

I always make you smile, laugh and cry

 

For I will love you forever

 

My arms are always open to you

 

For I will be your support forever

 

My couch is always yours to sleep on

 

For i will shelter you forever

 

My lips are always there for you

 

For I will kiss you forever 

 

 

Forever I will be yours

 

Forever will you be mine 

 

Together until the end of time 

 

 

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I am just trying to be able to write good poetry so , any advice?

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  • Valley Girl silver member
    May 20, 2008

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    I like how you have written this about friendships. How you are there for them no matter what, the lips part kinda threw me, cuz I was thinking that this was written for a girl instead of a guy. But I figured it out quickly.


  • PoetBoy2008
    February 23, 2008
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    it's not your best work i must admit but it did flow pretty well.