Words frozen, drowned
in tortured lungs,
languidly swimming
against garbled sobs,
as oxygen suffocates
itself, paralyzed by
fear of ridicule.
Author notes
20 words, quote-inspired (A), for Char-Char.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie 10/10/30 by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
300 points, ended February 5, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I know for sure I often choke on the right words to say in any given situation. This is very true.
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wow, such powerful words penned here. great use of only 20 words. Congrats on the silver trophy and good luck in the other contest.
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love this it was great ,... Congrats on the silver
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your words resembled exactly what i meant with the lungs. i loved yur wording its captured amazingly well done
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Wonderful work here and good
luck to you with this one here.
Thanks for sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
Oh, wow. Now this is what I call excellent. I loved the word choice, the darkness that you created, and I can definitely imagine feeling this way.
All the best. -
Wow, this is pretty intense... tugs right at my heart.
Good luck in the contest.
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