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What Makes Me

Alone and stranded

I thank god for the peace

With beautiful surroundings

What else could I need

Lapping up the sunshine

Having a dip in the sea

Making a hula skirt out of

That single palm tree

Though in this haven of serenity

My vanity would proceed

See my lipstick is my saviour

For it's what makes me

Besides a sexy man might also

Get washed up on this beach

 

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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    February 14, 2008

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    A very good piece of writing

    This is a really good piece of writing. Maybe showing your true desires Katey?. To have all that senerity, and peace. Your rhyme in this is very good too - as is your imagery [which is strong].

    I also took from this piece a certain loneliness which was underlying the words. You have a talent that you should keep on using Katey.

    Well done for this.
    Much love
    Wayne Leon
    xx

  • soccer220
    February 5, 2008

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    lol..... this is really funny. I like your background and picture! Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Whyitt U
    February 5, 2008

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    Love it!!! Absolutely love it! You even got a smile out of me...well done!

    Wyatt xxx


    • Scrunter
      February 5, 2008
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      Glad it brought a smile to your face hun... xxx