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Rain on Me

Tap, tap, tap
Eyes closed, winds brush my face
Thunder destroys my body
Raindrops taint my lips
Yet lightening brightens darkened souls


Rain on me

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  • just-an-amateur
    February 10, 2008

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    I agree with Crimson Raine. I could feel the rain whipping around my head as thunder and lightening competed for attention in the background. If I ever had to be caught somewhere, I'd like it to be in the middle of a storm (as long as I'm not going to get struck by ligthening)! With 25 words you wrapped a story around the reader's shoulders and shared a little piece of that magical moment in a storm. Excellent job! Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest!
    ~M~


  • XXCrimsonRaineXX
    February 5, 2008

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    wow, i love it. the flow was nice, and it was short. yet, it had sooo much imagery for being short. i could practically feel the rain around me. this was an amazing write.