Waiting in the halls
I'm keeping my secrets hidden
behind these dark walls
these thoughts are so forbidden,
And I think I'm falling fast.
This wasnt the plan
I never wanted it to last.
Keeping the pain of him away,
Leaving his bed, with other thoughts in hand,
Hearing what you say,
when words are short of demand.
Wishing I could leave you for good,
I had a thought I almost lost
I think we misunderstood.
This is the end,
and I say good bye,
Even as I want you again.
Author notes
This might not be one of my best, but I really doubt its my worst... I'm not really sure how you will interpret this, but its about a woman that is in a relationship with a man, and finds more comfort with another man. it kinda happens alot.
A contest entry
- Beautiful imagery prompt....to inspire your thoughts and unleash your keyboards! by ears2hearyou.
750 points, ended February 16, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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"I had a thought I almost lost
I think we misunderstood."
this is my FAVORITE part of the poem, actually one of the favorite things i've written in while, just those lines say things to me. lol but of course, being the one that wrote it, i'm a little bias. but they seem to have many different meanings each time I re-read this. weird huh? -
I love how you portrayed the womans feelings without making her look whoreish great job!
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This situation is a common one, but I think you painted it well. I'm actually quite fond of this...at the moment. Eh, I'm deviating from the darkness in small increments.
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I thought you wrote this really well!
Actually I think we can all be honest enough to say
goodbye's are tough! but some a little harder than
others...especially if you are not returning their love.
ouch! and affairs of the hearts do twist and turn!
I thought that was an excellent take on the prompt.
Smartly written too...really good flow!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) thankyou for your entry!
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