Stranded on this desert Island
and only one thing can I choose,
let me think just for a moment
on what I'd surely hate to lose.
You can take away my toothbrush,
let my clothes and shoes just drown,
my make up and all my money,
can go without a minor frown.
To the tv and the radio,
I will gladly wave goodbye,
my mobile phone and music go
with no tear shed from my eye.
My aging car and old toolbox
I'll have no use for them here,
my furniture, old and crooked,
beneath the waves can dissapear.
Theres just one thing I'd hold on to
and save from a death at sea,
that would be my trusty computer
so I could log in daily to AP.
A contest entry
- What Can't You Live Without? by soccer220.
900 points, ended February 26, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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100th Hoodwink
Ann D,
This is a wonderful poem expressing what is truly important and what is not, You chose very wisely! Well done!
You have been selected to be a Hoodwink victim of the Poetic Bandits Group. We are celebrating our 100th Hoodwink by reaching out to members of ALLPOETRY and expressing our appreciation for this wonderful poetic comminity. Thank you so much for all you do here to make this a great site, your efforts are noted and appreciated.
Dennis
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Hoodwinked
Wow. I would not have ever thought of something as great as this. You have a great imagination. I really like this piece. When I first started reading I thought it was going to end in a totally different way. But I like the way that you ended it. The rhyme and flow is stunning. I loved it a lot keep it up.
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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very good poem with the smooth flow of words....i enjoyed it ...
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and a bag of chips to much while roaming
mmm making me think of what i would save now - my poems it has to be
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haha awesome
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sounds like a serious addiction. AP is such a great site indeed.
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Great poem.
Arn't we all AP addicts?
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this is cute,and funny with good rhyme.i like it.
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Hehehe! I love it. I can totally relate ~~ I am addicted to AP, too! I really like the rhyming in this one, the rhythm is great...
~ What cute little poem you have here, what a pleasure to read... Thanks for sharing
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That is cute I
it I really like your rythem I didn't expecct the end it was funny 
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You are Hardcore
Well, I'd probably choose my BlackBerry but a computer is a good answer to. You must surely like all the crap that we give you on a daily basis. Are you a masochist? Did I really spell that word right? Wow.. anyways... I'm glad to be back and thank you for being such a sweetheart. I hope to read more of you when I have more time. Take care and be blessed!
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Cute! I wasn't expecting that. THis is light-hearted and fun.
On top of that, it makes us think that really, we don't need 80% of the stuff that we have (I write about this too).
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Awwww...
Adorable poem, and yes, very funny, but allow me to appreciate the concept of having the strength to let go of all things that are considered valuable and expensive, while accepting the humourously presented sadistic situation. Tis true that the comp can be placed among said objects, but not while it is seen as a portal to AP, which has become a hobby, a part of our lives, for many of us. I share a bond with my comp, mostly because everything I have on it is purely me, in it's basic concepts. Awesome poem, and I wish you great luck in the contest! -
great write i love it. thats what i would want too is my computer. thanks for sharing this and best of luck in the contest hun.
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LOVE IT
LOL HAHAHAHA I LOVE IT!
That is the sweetest, greatest thing ever! Same here, completely-same here!
hearts and hugs
Wolf Heart
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hahaha lovely
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Like everyone else here, I thought this was great..Good luck in the contest!
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Hehe that would have been my second choice...first would of course been a boat, to get off said island wonderfully written, good luck
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lol
I´m pretty sure i´m a bit more materialistic than that, although a bit more careful aswell..i´d not end up on the island in the first place
nice write though, i totally knew the ending before i read it
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Heheeh Yep, know this feeling a smidge to well
You summed up 90% of the population here I think, the rhyme is fantastic and the sentiment even better...
Thanks for all you do around here my invisible angel
Karen
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Grand penning Poetess! Ha! I love this. And I think most would agree with this senerio too. Up and here with mornings first cup,with me towel wrapped after a shower,During meals. Let's face it,I'm hooked.But, in good company.
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A few years from here, we're going to have to force you into rehab
But I'll be your best buddy in there we would be able to wave our fists angrily then at everyone trying steal the computer away
I'm going to weapon myself with pompoms, you should use that old walking stick
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lol, this is so cute and true for a lot of us
I enjoyed and related
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clean yourself up woman! your going on stage in two minutes
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Well Done
Loved it Ann! how true it is. As much as many people like to complain about things here, most would miss it if it were no longer available- some more than others. I,like yourself, would be in the "some" category. I liked the ebb and flow of this, it stayed even all through. The first three verses are very lyrical and beg to be sung, while the forth verse has somewhat shorter lines than the previous three-well not so much shorter lines than shorter words or less syllables-and it comes off as spoken, then for the final verse you return to the light bounce of the first three with a cheeky, yet truthful, last line. The whole thing comes off with a hint of Monty Python and works for me on every level...peace Terry
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I really liked this... it brought a huge smile to my face. I especially loved the last verse, how true that is! Good luck in the contest.
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Lol, indeed, where would we be without our computers and allpoetry. A world lives within, a world of fascination, feelings, beauty. A world of memories, news, friendships and fancies.
'twould be a sad and lonesome world without our computer... of course we'd need one that's wireless, not much company looking at 'no internet connection found'
Good luck in the contest, Sis. This is a good one
luv and
Dee
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Think we would all go into severe withdrawal if we lost our computer and AP. First thing in the morning and last thing at night I check out this site. Can relate to your poem - sentiments well expressed in these lines; easy to read and understand. Good flow, rhythm and rhyme too.
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This is really cute. You have a really good point! The rhyming is great! You background is awesome too. Thanks so much for entering and good luck!
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lol this was really cute I think all of us can live without the TV actually... I get sick of seeing politics lol. Anyhow, now that I've gone off subject lol I go back on it. Imagine what would happen if AP was not on for a whole week
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hahaha
lmao! thats kinda sad, cuz giving up tv and radio and stuff is almost considered the same, but this is really cute. i thought it was gonna be something like my dignity or something [lamish] lol i really like the ending great write. it flowed really well also. thanks for sharing gave me a smile.
~Madi~
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