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Silent Death

Head bleeding
eyes swollen
unable to see your terrifying face

Listening to tormenting silence
enveloping the obsidian sky

As I lie here in petrified death
waiting for your final strike

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30 words

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  • DrkPoet silver member
    April 8, 2008

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    This was eerie on a number of notes, and the most haunting was the end waiting for that final strike and my mind is only left to wonder what that might be and also by whom which makes it more intriguing. Well penned thanks for entering it.


  • leander Moderators member
    February 21, 2008

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    Well this is a very dark and rather haunting poem that you have written here it's as if this is out of the eyes of an abused woman, who is waiting to be murdered by her violator...

    Well done!
    Leander


  • satan-
    February 17, 2008

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    I'm reading it over and over...and the emotions still wash over me every time. Great job, and thanks for entering!


  • Dmonik
    February 6, 2008

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    Damn, I got the feeling of a victim waiting for the final blow, the death blow. This is dark.
    This is powerfully written. The reader can't help but feel sorry for the victim in this piece.
    Bravo!

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