I am the black of discontent,
renting my soul to unfold
it's magic in seductive thinking ink.
Bewitched maze of sublime grind
scatters about, with dust-uttered words
of disembodied fantasy.
Crazed memory strikes
the heights of nowhere,
to plummet in ricocheted fusion,
illusions of power and control.
I've given birth on hundreds of planes
with the aim to infuse,
and intertwine the mind;
bleak suggestions of dark victory...
come with me!
You may hold in your grasp
all that you ask
yes, it is yours
in scores of gluttony,
riches beyond belief
royalty, cloaked in plumes of maroon.
Break open white shell of containment,
and consider yourself spent
into many realms that fire up to flame,
and burn from boiled-over imagination.
No boundaries to cross, limitless desires met...
My laboratory summons labyrinth,
there is no labor worth the toil, relax!
All spoil belongs to those
who perform the most dastardly deeds.
We feed off those of good countenance,
for they have missed
the right to forge
in the dark light of our company;
where ravens caw, dragons feast,
and beasts are prospects of delight.
Do you not hear
the voice of choice?
It bellows in indigo
with ebony persuasion,
laughing at those who flutter
with wings of hope.
Despair is to be cared for
with riches, and wealth,
belching from bellies filled.
Do not fear the metallic taste
or sulfur scent of kinship.
Rip away the clothes of righteousness,
and blend your souls with majesty.
Promissory notes and contracts
in dire need of blood-let signatures.
Eyes of needles, passed through
with ease of pleasing all senses.
The underworld unfurls, and ignites!
Come, let go of your world, and join mine.
Author notes
photo:
talented artistry: deviantart.com
link: Fear_and_Hope_by_ratpat13
Form - Progressive Poetry
Line one - 1 line
Stanza two - 2 lines
Stanza three - 3 lines
Stanza four - 4 lines
and so on...
This is a ten line Progressive Poem. It consists of 10 stanzas. There is no minimum or maximum line or stanza limit to Progressive Poetry.
Wanna try the Form? Here's a contest for ya!
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2390020
In a list
A contest entry
- Invite Only: Favorites by Lj-.
600 points, ended March 4, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites. favourites only please. by Ryno.
300 points, ended March 10, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thats a really interesting form... I should try it out someday
Looks tricky
As for the poem... I loved the personification of the persuasion you were doing and how the descriptive imagery was just... wow... with telling the story and getting the points across
Excellent. Thanks for the entry.
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i think it is only progressive if it skillfully builds from one place to others, and this poem does so and with a majestic sweep and call... excellent...PK
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Brilliant.
I simply love it.
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Thank You!
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I have got to try one of this form You are awesome no two ways about it! Loved the read.
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Sounded like the master of the darks voice actually coaxing one on to join up and leave the good behind.fantastic verbal imagery and very interesting form. thanx for the poem and the info on the form, conni
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wow~ that's a pretty high bar you've set with this as an example hon. Amazing.
How could one not comment on this, this is so well written and thought out.
wow.
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New form, progressive poetry, going from one line to ten line verses is quite an undertaking in itself, and you have done wonders with this one.
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A very interesting form. I love the idea of there being no minimum or maximum line or stanza limit. Free rein with this gives the poet a wonderful opportunity for expression. Often I have found I have wanted to add an extra line simply because that last piece was able to complete the whole picture. I shall have to give it a go, thank you Renee, a most interesting and effective read.
Katie
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I confess it didn't speak to me, but I am mightily impressed by the work and thought that went into it.
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Stupendous
This poem is so imaginative and brilliant. You are a great writer and you will do great in the contest. I really love this poem.
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great form
I think you will do well in the contest. I like your style and this has taught me a new style of writing. Thank you for sharing this w/ us.
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Is that escher? Who's the artist?
Nevermind, I liked the art that followed. When you get to your utopia, please send me a postcard. I'd like to visit on a temporary visa, then maybe marry some chick or some dude and live there permanently.
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First off, really powerful pictures. Love them.
I love the first line. That's a really good line to start it with and the second flows from it nicely.
"disembodied fantasy" Very nice.
I absolutely love that final stanza. Such descriptions of "metallic taste" and "sulfur scent" allow the reader to 'feel' the poem, so to speak.
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Well Done!
The progressive form is echoed in the progressive text.
You lead us from dust to maroon to indigo to dark in teasing, temping steps. Each verse we read further nudges us from deeds to despair - and onward. I'll reread it, but not late at night!
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I have never written a poem such as this. Although I do shy away from writing and reading long poems, I read yours and was captivated by it. Perhaps it was all darkness and mystery. Good work!
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I love the write and I do like the form... I shall have to try this
Peace and Love
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I loved how this just seemed to build into the ending Porgressive indeed,
Well done, well worded to deliver the message
Thanks for sharing,
Love and Light
Forzentearz -
I wanna join your world. Right now, this minute, this moment. You know I aint good on talkin much, But I will hold your hand. I have no words...no words.
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Dear Renee
Did a "union" muse inspire you to this?
I haven't got that good of eyesight to really see the picture well, but am figuring that you nailed it.
You are one very exciting poet. And thanks for introducing us to another of your grandbabies. Darling!
Be good, and be well!
John-Las Vegas, Nevada
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Wow, this piece was just completely amazing to me! I absolutely loved it and thought you did a beyond excellent job writing it. I'm just speechless, it's a wonderful piece of work that's for sure. Keep up the fanstatic work!
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Epically written. I bow down at your skills.
I shuddered in delight.
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That is a really powerful poem that you wrote
I can see why many of the judges are giving high praise!
YOu really used the words to capture the imagery and
the reader for the first line to the last.
Outstanding job on this poem! Good luck in the contest,
it's a tough one!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) applaud-applaud-applaud!
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Yes, my mistress! Why did I not see this before?! LOL
Wow. Love the flow. Made the read just fly on by! Was hard to stop wasn't it? Like trying to do 60-0 in a Mack truck hitched with an M-1 Abram... All in 5 seconds. But you didn't swerve at all. As a matter of fact, you kept going! Trucked right trough me and is now driving around in my imagination!
"The underworld unfurls, and ignites!
Come, let go of your world, and join mine."
Everything before that was just build up for the creative juices, the possiblilities of running amok in your plane! Well done! On occasion, I shall call you "Turkey Bird". A term of endearment normally reserved for my blood sister. LOL
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Very intesesting well written piece. There are many layers to this... maybe even more than you intended! hahaaa.... Now listen Renee.... I write haiku... so these long poems are a lot of work for me to read!!! Please, keep that in mind next time!!!! haahahaa... wonderful write, dear one.
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So haunting...temptation of evil upon weak souls.
Strong imageries you have here. Doomed will be those who take an easier path by making a deal with darkness.
Gave the shivers!
Happy thoughts now
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