Clouded eyes bloodstained dress bleeding footsteps not much farther now
These drops of blood upon the floor make their way to kitchen door
Outside is just a glimpse away run, she can not each step to painful
Hot breath of her menace breathing down her neck she flees to the night
Daring not to look over her shoulder she prays the silent prayers of safety
Shadow growing closer not much farther, the door she can almost feel free
Bloody puddle, she slips to the ground her menace hovers above her now
There you lie in the bed you created for yourself , no longer can you escape
Look at your life as I show you exactly what you have become my dear
Her arms outstretched she reaches for a somewhat familiar face, so close
Who are you she beckons loudly into the night, silence is all that echoes
Come closer she begs sobbing I know there is someone in here with me
Dragging across bloodstained tiles she beckons at the shadows once more
Shiny object on the floor just within her grasp, hands can not feel to grip
Familiar face grows so close yet remains shadowed in the darkness
Who are you? What do you want of me? Please just answer me
Voices fill the air of once silent unlit room, she listens closely
I am where your soul lives the person you want to be but can not
What do you mean she screams? Too many pills, worthlessness
No bottle left unopened no capsule untaken clouded mind taken over
Shatter glass seems to come together forming mirror on the tiles
Dragging pulling she reaches the glass she does understand what she sees
This must be a trick some sort of illusion the woman in this mirror is me
NO my dear take a closer look she is what you used to be
Blink your heavy eyes my dear now I will show you who you are
Skin wrinkled eyes sunken in missing teeth and your children are lost
TAKE IT AWAY….I will not see this my boys are here for me
How can your loved ones love you if you despise yourself so much
Abuse your body pill after pill man after man drink after drink
You dead to them you pitiful fool now your dead to the world as well
Run no farther flee no more the days and nights now one
You had your chance you wasted the precious life you were given
Here you will stand in judgment and ask the Lord to be forgiven
Author notes
Many thanks to the Marvelous art of "Derek Hess" for the picsture used in this piece!!!
Please tell me what you think
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that is deep keep on writing
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Thank you!
Thanks for reading and for the great comment!
Shannon
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My Goodness!
Before I caught on, this piece seemed a little disturbed to me. But then in the mirror, when she saw it was she, it became as disturbing as can be.
It is such a horror to see how some people lose and destroy them selves for addictions, once thought to sooth the pain. You have done such an excellent job in sending out in such a loud voice this message, hopefully for some people to stop and think!Bravo! Keep the ink flowing my dear Poet
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Strips us all bare!
Its only when a poem like this confronts that you once again realize this could be the person next door, and you may not know it! We belong to the "hurry up handshake" (Toffler) society, and most refuse to acknowledge our responsibility to each other's health and wellbeing. Your poem brings this into focus.
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Breathless. You be become the person in this poem. Feel what she felt, Feel the confusion and horror. Realization at the end, of what has happened and what is to come. Beautifully written, the way you isolate certain words, brings in a more powerful feel to the poem. Overall, Everything was done wonderfully. The picture at the top was amazing, and spoke to me. I can understand where this piece is coming from. Thankyou for your gift to mankind!
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Thank you so much for taking time to read this piece!! I am so glad you "got it"!! It means so much each time someone reads and appreciates my work!!
Thanks so much!!
Shannon
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You have an amazing powerful mind
The gory picture has been painted beautifully...
Kisses...all over, honey!
Galaxy2
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Galaxy
Thanks for taking time to read this piece! I am glad you could appreciate it! I tend to stay along the dark lines when I write!!
Glad you like it!!
Shannon
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I love this, great imagery, paints a great picture in my mind.. Nice write, keep up the good work =]
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Leila,
Thank you for reading this piece! I know its a little dark but Im glad people can appreciate what I write! I look forward to reading some of your work!!
Shannon
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1st paragraph..she can not step each is too painful.
switch it and flows easier..
that was bright glaring light in the dark poem..well written and stark!
well done poet, well done, frightening too!
ears/Seattle
my style is pull...yours is to push..kindly reminder,
we are to pull the towards the door upon which they
knock...not we knock them down and shove them in.
said very kindly and respectfully.
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wow....... im a fan of rhyming to be honest... >.> but this was amazing, jsut amazing, and really deep. it makes you think and it makes you want to appreciate your life x.x wow, your amazing ^-^
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Wow! You came up with all this from the picture? The story told is sad but it kept my attention which says a lot coming from me. Thanks for sharing.
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Thanks for reading and commenting on this piece. Yeah I tend to write a little more on the dark side of things so when I saw the picture I just went with what came to me at the time!! Thanks again!!
Shannon
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I like this piece. The structure of it is a little awkward, but in a sense adds to the distressing nature of the piece. Great imagery, in a sad macabre sort of way.
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Thanks for reading and commenting I am glad you enjoyed the read!
Shannon
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I must say, I do indeed like this! The poem itself to mee seems chaotic in a sense, like that's the atmosphere the poem creates when you read it, but it works in line with the picture. I love the lines 'Clouded eyes bloodstained dress bleeding footsteps not much farther now' and 'Outside is just a glimpse away' and 'Hot breath of her menace breathing down her neck she flees to the night
Daring not to look over her shoulder she prays the silent prayers of safety', fantastic imagery.
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Thanks so much for taking time to read and comment on this piece! I am glad that you liked it, it's one of my more "strange" pieces!!
Shannon
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Nice take on the picture. "I am where your soul lives the person you want to be but can not." I really like that line. Great job!..Patty
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Patty
Thanks for taking time to read this piece it has been on here for sometme with no feed back I thought maybe it was a little "off" I really appreciate your comments!!
Shannon
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