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love tunes


the day I
met you-

I must have
been the happiest
girl in the world.

you with
curly hair
& me with
mine,

along with
brown eyes
& crazy jokes.

&

out of
backseat tunes
from leather
seats,

we shared
halfway glances
over love tunes

&

amongst
jokes & laughs
maybe I realized

I love you.

[funny-
it’s been only
two days with
you.]

dang-
I miss you
already.

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  • xTomorrowx
    February 6, 2008

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    Another beautiful one, it's so awesome, with the smallest things seeming the most important...
    Great work, and good luck!


  • transit
    February 6, 2008

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    aaww

    this poem had me blushing. The first sentence set the tone for a good love poem. I love how you make such insignificant comparisons but somehow, they seem to matter. I do that quite a lot too.

    and yes, love is a funny thing. Two days it may seem but still, your heart felt a little lighter. Though it feels a bit droopy again, so what? those two days still came. Beautiful poem. Best of luck in the contest hon!

    P.S. updates.

    love,
    transit


  • Miss Faith
    February 5, 2008

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    AWWWWWW.

    I LOVE THIS! so cute.

    "out of
    backseat tunes
    from leather
    seats,

    we shared
    halfway glances
    over love tunes"

    thanks so much for entering...I adore this piece!