angel tears
drench souls anew
burdened by sorrow
Love
overdue
knows even the Trio
may not heal the chill
of hearts
withdrew
from mercy
by free will
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- Image Inspired, 15 poets, 15 Lines by Dutch Doll.
725 points, ended February 7, 2008, 14 entries
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The old debate of Arminian doctrine of Free Will versus Calvinistic doctrine of Predestination [or unconditional election].
I was expecting a poem of 17th century doctine and instead...
...I get this -- after I read it through - It's beautiful. True, and painfully applicable.
I mean a nice play on words for the title, that some have a pre-destined free will. God gives them a choice, but to His utmost bane and sorrow, they choose their own God, themselves.
The rhythmic flow is astounding as well, the words were well chosen.
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Heh, I like the use of 'trio' instead of the trinity, almost more personal, like your best friends.
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wonderful!!! great take on the picture prompt, best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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You took the prompt in a different direction than I did but I love it. It's so deep and dramatic... the words seem to echo that of the picture. Well done. Good luck.
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this is very sad but we all can relate to this so few words that so much, we are often like children never thinking about the consequences. EXCELLENT WRITE GOD BLESS
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Oh wow, this is such a lovely poem its actually a sad thought, knowing something you used to think could heal all wont help this time. Amazing job, keep writing please!
-xNightxOfxAgonyx
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Very beautifully penned, became more fond of it the second time through, love the feeling I got from this, thanks for entering, good luck
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Thank you once again for hosting this contest ...
and inspiring me to write this. X
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