I'll keep you locked inside my mind
And take you out when I am low.
The joy you'll bring they'll never find.
What can they know?
Your voice excites me from inside.
I do not need to see your face.
You can't be seen but never hide,
Within that place.
If ever I can't find the way,
Your odd remarks will help me out
And locked inside is where you'll stay.
I have no doubt.
Your cheerful face lit up my youth,
On your visits to our home.
Surrounded by we four uncouth,
Who now can roam.
My eldest son we gave your name.
He wears it now and you live still.
Life is just a silly game,
You won at will.
Author notes
This came out rather shorter than I thought, I like him kept inside, just let you see a glimpse.
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nice for your grandady
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This is touching. I'm not sure I like the 8,8,8,4 meter though. It seems unbalanced. Anyway, I don't pretend to know much about rhyme because I don't do it myself.
Thanks for sharing
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No problem at all, it is a rather relaxed form of sapphic ode and I love it as a form for lots of things, but it seems to me to be really good for tender poems like this. However if you prefer something else I can do that too, I'll pen you a sonnet to replace it tonight, or maybe something just as well flowed but not so rigid.
We aim to please
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