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Fossils of My Life

Bottled fury bubbles and billows into the atmosphere
Ballooning strangely stretching into a massive sphere
The blistering air makes it heartbreaking
For the rivers of my pain and resentment sizzling
Yielding to evaporation and desperation in fears
my skies grow so intense, pregnant with my tearful clouds
Darkness prevails and dimness over my being clouts
storms and lightning of rage glare and glaze
striking my world and setting it ablaze.
My clouds of grief pour torrential tears
Overflowing the barrages of my struggle mutineers
Destroying its boundaries, bursting my world and drowning
inflamed passions and emotions rumbling
rivers of my love, passions, longing, and desires,
along with my flooded world dissolves spreading fires  
molten steel into my inner volcano and lava boiling in demolition
within my world and love quaking and relinquishing to attrition.
the ferocity distended volcano holds moans of molten fury and neglect,
remorse, soreness and kindness spurting down on my life erratically wrecked
Turning into a mountain of ruins and fossils of my life tree.
after the roaring fires and glaring light comes the ice that covers the debris
and what was once upon a time ME and my life
abridged into perfect obliteration and strife
Is that what you swore to offer me in your love?
Man it is nothing but vengeance of my being and a shove!!

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  • Hannah Carr
    June 10

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    Good from what I could read...sorry but ur background and color mixture is very distracing. But what I could pay attention to was good.


  • TheDemonEve
    April 20
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    Great imagery and alliteration. Your emotion is good, too, but that is also where the problem lies. There are so many emotions here that they get a little muddled; they lack development and definition. The anger gets a little lost in this. Fine-tune this piece and you will have a gem.

    Best of luck and thanks for entering!


  • Tercil gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    The feelings were as like nature intended, and the main feeling in this was turblulence, it was sure made to feel like a rocky situation, I wouldmhave liked to have seen a more mellow background to enjoy it even further, good read.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 20, 2008
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    Wonderfully put, great choice of words to fit together, I find this rather eruptive.


  • AddictingAccident
    March 29, 2008
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    the ferocity distended volcano holds moans of molten fury and neglect<--- wonderful line. Some great metaphors and very powerful emotions. Good luck and thank you for entering!


  • Gagiikwe
    February 16, 2008

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    drowning in alliteration

    When trees ossify the are said to have pertified. So, your life tree has petrifed not fossilised.
    The title and one mention of fossils don't quite fit in with the rest of the poem.

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