The angels we once held on high
bow their heads in sorrow and cry,
for the paths that they see us choose,
winning here, while our souls we lose.
Where man once use to look ahead
now what he has does count instead.
Not looking for heavens glory,
life right now their only story.
So heaven weeps and angels cry
for each of us when we do die.
Riches were gathered on the earth,
not working for our new rebirth.
So listen close and you will hear,
the angels cry for us my dear.
A contest entry
- Image Inspired, 15 poets, 15 Lines by Dutch Doll.
725 points, ended February 7, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Iincreadible
What a increadibly true poem. I loved your poem you wrote here. This is fabulous and just what I needed to read. This kind of truth helps to keep me humble this I do know. Thank you for sharing your gift with me.
Many Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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this is so true...very well written and very beautiful
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A beautiful and sorrowful poem.
"Where man once use to look ahead
now what he has does count instead.
Not looking for heavens glory,
life right now their only story."
- So very true!
A very cool poem!
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this deserved a tropy
your message is true and wise
great poem
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Congratulations
Top winner in the contest.
Poem is an outpouring of sorrow that is deep and penetrating to the reader. Well done.
Structure is great, brevity, excellent content, good rhythm and rhyme scheme.
Thanks for sharing!
bjarne
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good rhyme scheme cogent good alliteration could have used 'to work' instead of working ANYWAYS a veru good effort and normally don't think photos add to a poem - but that is just me. regards zaj
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This is a great poem, I have commented on it before so I will just say thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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I have read a lot of your poems but must say this is the best ever I love this poem it was so beautiful and filled with such emotion and such truth this made me cry and it touched me in away i cant explain what a great poem this is now my all time favorite of all time such grace such talent never let the ink run dry my dear poet friend this is amazing breath taking thank you for sharing this with all of us this is a master piece you should be very proud and i would of gave you gold.
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Thank you so much for that amazing comment, you make me feel very humbled! Your comment means a lot more to me than you realize, since many times I have felt as though I should quit writing. So thank you very very much!!!!!!!!!
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EXCELLENT
wonderful write. you have such a beautiful message. great rhythm and rhyme and filled with vivid imagery. it seems so hard for people to let go of their material possessions and only rely on their faith, our society has a keep up with the jones attitude. more people need to read this. you are so very talented. keep writing! God bless you always
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Beautiful, sad and true...
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So very true, I bet if there are angels they really are crying for mankind... I know i do! Very beautiful poem thank you for entering
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Thank you so much for the silver trophy!! I am very honored.
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SO LOVELY!!!!
You have such a beautiful message in your words. It seems so hard for people to let go of their material poessions and only rely on their faith. I was always taught that material things are only that, they come and they go but if something comes from ones heart it lasts forever.
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This is beautiful, sad, your rhyme is perfect. Great take on the picture, best of luck in the contest.
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whisper
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you do do rhyme beautifully, you know that?
Stunning.
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When I started reading it, I read it to the tune of "Angels We Have Heard on High". It's very beautiful! Another wonderful write.
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A very good one. Great job with this one, it is jus the sentement that we all should have about our world. The Angels must be perplexed by us.
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An excellent piece flowed beautifully made the reader ponder loved the first verse particularly well done with this strong piece.
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This was incredible. It really brought out the sorrow and the full essence of depth and despair in the picture... well done. And good luck.
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