Floating clouds in dreams I seek,
resting eyes so gently on
heart’s provision for respite
not arising until dawn.
Warmth in waters of the wash,
bathing words of spoken care,
bubbling perfume in the rinse
knowing that he will be there.
For with him my thoughts are kept
comforting my every woe,
strengthened by the love we share
telling me he will not go.
Soft lips touch with gentle glance
and his arms will hold me tight,
swaying softly as song’s beat
takes the music into night.
Heaven’s pulses twinkle clear
closing eyes on tired sky
breathing in devotion’s scent
yielding to the moonlight’s sigh.
Author notes
~going nowhere~
prompt: quote
'what comforts you?...what brings you joy and pleasure?...may I ask?'...Unknown
A contest entry
- may I ask?... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended February 6, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Random Feelings by Harbinger of Death.
355 points, ended March 3, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ANYTHING SHORT by Blooming Poet.
400 points, ended March 7, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You know what comforts me....This poem
I'm like on cloud eleven. WEEEEE
Floating up in the clouds.
But seriously this is very stunning -
Thank you for entering my contest. This peice has amazing rythmes to it
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i love this poem! it's pretty!!
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Awe. What a moving poem, very heartfelt with a beatiful flow... I loved the title, so original.
Congrads on the Trophy! Ryan
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Excellent
Very creative and well done. Congratulations on your trophy
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-sighs sweetly- This is a very comforting poem... Makes me want to drift off and daydream endlessly and perhaps drought down any feelings that come to mind... Meaning, what an inspirational write.
Great response to the prompt you were given/chose, and it flowed nicely.
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Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!
M a r l u x i a
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Heaven’s pulses twinkle clear
closing eyes on tired sky
breathing in devotion’s scent
yielding to the moonlight’s sigh.
Ah..what a great and magical immagery is here..well done..and goodluck...
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"For with him my thoughts are kept, comforting my every woe, strengthened by the love we share, telling me he will not go."...this is my favorite stanza of this write, but the entire piece is filled with warmth and confort, just as the contest prompts ask. Well done, poet. Best of luck. Peace, Rhonda
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thank you so much for a wonderful comment.
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this is beautifully written dear.
"Heaven's pulses twinkle clear
closing eyes on tired sky"
*sigh*
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Do you ever write anything less than perfect? The imagery presented here is beyond words. Best of luck in the contest (though you don't need it).
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you just started my day with a smile on my face... thank you so much.
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... by the hammer of thor! thats beautiful! honestly, you did a GREAT job on they rhyme and meter, and the imagery is gorgeous! AUSGEZEICHNET!!!
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