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Randy

Randy, where are you now?
Anger taking over your soul,
Never once did you stop to ask why or how.
Day after day I think about how you used to be,
Yesterday only a fleeing memory.

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  • PonyPride
    February 7, 2008

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    well done. The first three lines have flow issues but the last two stanzs go together wonderfully.