We eat bread and drink red juice,
We "love our neighbors as we love ourselfs".
We sing and pray and call him holy,
we call him master and listen about him.
We learn about him and love him,
We need don't doubt his power or doubt his son came.
We need him and go to him for help,
We bring him in our hearts and don't reject him.
We can't see,smell,tought,hear,or even taste him but,
We know he's there.
He is the master and
His son is Jesus,
His name is God and
He is the All Mighty one.
Author notes
I was inspired to wright this poem during communique at Church on Sunday!
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good start
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Great church poem. I like the flow and imagery in this. Thanks for sharing!
~Cassie
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"ourselfs"... second line, should be ourselves. sorry just caught it.
"We need don't doubt his power or doubt his son came." just a suggestion. "We need not doubt His power, nor that His son came"....
this is a simple explanation of things. thanks for sharing.
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taking communion at church sometimes makes us feel very good about life and we can then write poems like this. Feel your faith in these lines.
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Lovely poem. Thanks for sharing with the group.
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this is a beautiful poem thank you for sharing this
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Thank you for posting this beautiful piece in my contest. I really enjoyed what it had to say.
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Nice sentiments expressed and you've already had the spelling errors pointed out and you can fix them or not.
ourselves ... touch are a couple. Thanks for sharing with the group. -
Cute poem. Thank you for sharing this with the group.
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Lovely sentiments. You've clearly expressed the faith that we both share. However, there were some spelling and grammar mistakes that distracted from this piece. Such as: "ourselfs" should be "ourselves." Fine tune this one to give it more impact.
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um...alright...
weak.. poem.. all in all.. it don't have a rhyme scheme.. which I'm surprised it not..being so simple..
it's though alright...
comment or critique my poem if you will kindly do.. please thanks
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