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Craig

Once, I had thought love was true.
I believed in you. 
I believed you believed in me, too.

Now I wonder where you are
as your son checks the clock every few moments.
He wonders aloud.
Wheres my daddy?
Does he not love me?
Does he not love you?


I should wonder where you are
 as once checked the clock
and wondered to myself,
wheres your Daddy?
Does he not love me?
Does he not love you?

Once, I thought that love was true

Now I know

its just not with you.

Author notes

Just a quickie on thoughts of former lovers in the life of mine.

A contest entry

what does a man need?

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  • August Starlight silver member
    January 25

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    Wow, when I created the contest a subject like this never crossed my mind. This poem is amazing. Sad, of course, and I can feel the pain in it. But it is an amazing write.


  • Blooming Poet
    March 27, 2008

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    so sad. relationships ending is sso painful, but it only gets worse when a child or children are invovoled. You end up hurting a lot more and for a lot more reasons. Great wrrite.


  • Swan song gold member
    March 21, 2008
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    Nice start on this.


  • DarkestAngel68
    March 21, 2008

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    Perfectly Said...Perfectly Worded

    This poem is awesome. I have so felt that way before. Some of my ex's were pretty much losers and, I would have loved for them to see this poem. Excellent work...BRAVO!


  • Endeavor gold member
    February 9, 2008

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    I have read your verse
    Thank you so much for submitting your words to my contest
    I will comment in detail on my final selections
    I wish you well in the contest
    Thank you

    Rick


  • BeautifulFlame
    February 5, 2008
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    wow this was sad, a great write though and heartfelt
    Goodluck in this contest
    ~Lisa~


  • kennethlaney
    February 5, 2008
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    Good poem

    Love ain't true, love ain't fair, love is a preamp to hate.
    akes you feel good for a minute and hurts your hear for far longer. (Wouldn't trade it for anything in the world!)
    I THINK IN LINE 11 YOU MAY HAVE MISSED PUTTING AN (I) After or before once.


    • genevieve3
      February 23, 2008
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      HEy, right on! u know though. The bible says that love dosnt hurt. I believe if it does, to depth of ones sole, then it wasnt at all a gift or blessing but rather the devil playing tilt a whirl with ones heartstrings...haha me and my metafores. Thanks fore reading


      • kennethlaney
        February 23, 2008
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        Is that you in the picture? If it is I'm sure it would be hard for a man to leave you!


  • vici377
    February 4, 2008

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    the ? of the century

    yes what do they need..hehe..I know I have a great one..I am soo lucky..but friends of mine are not..this is a great write..that could be explored even more..thanx so much for sharing and best of luck in the contest..

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