Oh my love
while parting me secluded
you wanted that no one should discern
your identity
and your label should not be disclosed
and I kept tightly closed my lips
since I still cherish you
and intend to gaze you easygoing in life
but everybody gained access to that
it was you who misled me
my tearful eyes confessed all this fact
while my lips were ceased firmly
as I sworn-to
Oh my love...
Author notes
prompt...
"Pretending everything is right, to make it better, i hide my make-up smeared eyes, to show that im fine" Automatic Loveletter - Make-up smeared eyes.
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A contest entry
- Quotes Contest!! 1000 points =] [Now allowing prewrites!] by LeilaJayne.
1000 points, ended June 6, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This one still inspires tears...a tryst between lovers that becomes common gossip , and only the eyes can respond now( that's my perception)...so moving and easily understood by readers, I'm sure. Peace, Rhonda
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I love how you have a running theme throughout the poem. It is very sweet and then sad, which I like. I like the repeating line of "Oh my love..." this is a really good poem. Thank you for entering in my contest.
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I like how you captured this picture and filled it with emotion!
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very nice
I hear the blissful love resonating beautifully from your heart
very nice
and thank you for sharing it with us -
Ooh...this is so sad. Great take on the picture, they just go so well together.
my tearful eyes confessed all this fact
while my lips were ceased firmly
as I sworn-to
Oh my love
Very emotion charged words...they made me get a big lump in my throat and tears roll down my face.
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You brought tears to my own eyes with this one poet...so sad and hurt...wonderful emotion in this piece...best of luck in the contest... Peace, Rhonda
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