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To Live Like This

You ask about the chaos here?
Just let me tell you of my fear,
there is no calm and no delight;
to live like this just can’t be right.

I hate their shit and silly rules,
it’s all made up by stupid fools.
Chaotic stress makes me uptight,
to live like this just can’t be right.

I feel so angry when I read
of starving children and their need,
our common sense has taken flight;
to live like this just can’t be right.

I can’t stay calm with all these bills,
while politicians get their thrills.
It’s in the paper every night,
to live like this just can’t be right.

With traffic jams and honking horns,
my aching feet with swollen corns.
They keep the poor folks out of sight,
to live like this just can’t be right.

I grasp the chaos in my palm
and squeeze it tight ‘till I am calm.
I clench my fist with knuckles white,
to live like this just can’t be right.

 

 

 

Author notes

Word prompt: calm chaos
competing against: Unbroken record

Kyrielle:
A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines), and each quatrain contains a repeating line or phrase as a refrain. Each line within the poem consists of only eight syllables. There is no limit to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum. Some popular rhyming schemes for a Kyrielle are: aabB, ccbB, ddbB, with B being the repeated line, or abaB, cbcB, dbdB.

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  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    September 2

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    You surely do feel strong about this issue! I loved this form and see that this was a contest entry. You did very well on the prompt.

    Becks


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    May 31
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    This was very cool, its like an extra challenge to add the same line and not make it feel out of place. Each verse you brought it back naturally. The first time I read this I didn't notice the last line was the same it just seemed to fit so well, nice job
    Cyber Artist


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    Thank you so much for entering my contest, Amera. I think I like this form very much. I just love this poem. Lane


  • poetryality silver member
    February 19, 2008

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    This poem and it's subtle venom could be directed at many arenas, and in several areas of this chaotic world we live in. I too "clench my fists". That's a visual that I know most readers can relate to my dear poet. There is angst, disappointment, and the feel of ease all wrapped up together here. Excellent!

    You are such the example for poetry written true to form. Beautiful! I wish you well in your duel my friend!


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


  • Pure Thought silver member
    February 17, 2008

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    I accept 2 things

    That this is an excellent poem
    and
    you are right in your calmly (?) chaotic rant.
    Well done and nicely chosen definition of the prompt.
    Good luck, Buddy


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    February 14, 2008

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    A wonderfully powerful poem and the form is excellent...note to self...must try this form again.

    All the best in the contest...

    Love
    Sue


  • BellaD
    February 12, 2008
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    Great poem!

    Strong message delivered in beautifully penned verse. Awesome write. Best of luck in the contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 7, 2008

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    Wow.. such anger and frustration in this! Speaks volumes against the injustices and hurts of this world!

    I really liked it. Good luck!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 5, 2008

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    I think this is a bold step - taking a recognisably "arty" form like the kyrielle and making it colloquial in its phrasing, and vocabulary (like "shit" and "uptight"). The last verse is ironic and paradoxical. Well done. Good luck in the contest.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    February 5, 2008

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    This is outstanding! The form "calms" the chaos
    contained within these lines. The rant comes out
    clear and conformed. This write truly blends these
    opposites together while conveying emotion. Blue


  • moonbumps silver member
    February 5, 2008

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    Powerful write which speaks tomes. There are anti-christs everywhere but they are going to lose out in the end mark my words! You tell it like it is girl and don't hold back either! It is very difficult to think Christian thoughts sometimes you need to scream and shout-just to clear the air! Right on with this marvellous write. xxx


  • Never Fall in Love
    February 5, 2008

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    And you said cursing took away from many of my poems
    You're right though, it does add some effect to it and overall, jeez - this is a very strong poem.
    Someone should show this to the politicians and make them pay [but they'll never listen]
    Oh, what am I ranting about to avoid - your poems are so fantastic you leave me speechless.

    Never ♥


  • Tarja
    February 5, 2008

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    I'm not sure I have ever seen you curse before... I can tell you are fed up with the negative things in this life and just want release from it all. You expressed your frustrations very well. Thanks so much for the read darlin, good luck.


    • Amera gold member
      February 5, 2008
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      Thanks Tarja; good point. I don't think I have ever cursed in a poem before. I guess sometimes it can stress an issue.


  • HaleyMary
    February 4, 2008

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    Powerful write, Sis and speaks so much truth. There are so many days when I look at the world and all the wars and all the starvation in the world and I am disgusted that the governments that have so much power and could do so much with the world, just don't do anything that would make this world a more peaceful and happier place. Best of luck to you in the contest.

  • Papagallo
    February 4, 2008

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    So true. You have a lot of truth in your verses here. "to live like this just can't be right" is so true for us all. Another great poem. Good luck in your battles.


  • Cannonsfire
    February 4, 2008

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    Again I find a strong rhythym and flow and the subject is one we all should think on long and hard. Good luck in your duel. Love, C


  • pantress silver member
    February 4, 2008
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    so many truths in your words, and it shouldn't be. Best of luck in thecontest.


  • PerVirtuous
    February 4, 2008

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    I know what you mean... Us "poor" people have to stick together and rise up! Especially the first part. Anarchism, baby, anarchism! This is well crafted so that the repitition adds to rather than detracts from the poem. That is a very high degree of difficulty, so it should do well in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    February 4, 2008

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    What a great job you did on this one!! I love it! And you go Girl!!!! You tell it like it is! Cause you are sooooo right here!! I couldn't agree with you more!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    I cannot match your poem here
    Although I'll try so hard tonight
    And soon I think you'll have to fear
    When I at last can get it right

    I cannot fix the world alone
    Too many men stand up to fight
    I hope my answer will be shown
    When I at last can get it right

    I cannot educate the poor
    And lead them all into the light
    But I can start to teach I'm sure
    When I at last can get it right

    But you can show them all the way
    And lift us all to dizzy height
    My writing too may help some day
    When I at last can get it right


    Fortunately I am not drawn against you!
    Excellent poem, perfect flow rhyme and meter and content is top drawer too.


  • Faeryn
    February 4, 2008

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    I love the Kyrielle form (though haven't tried it yet) and you have penned a masterpiece here. Very powerful and sad. These are my favorite lines :
    "I hate their shit and silly rules,
    it’s all made up by stupid fools."

    It is indeed sad when a country who can do something to help won't because it means taking time and effort out of their own lives and money out of their pocket.

    we need more people like you in the world or we will end up killing the world.

    -Tay

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