Melted chocolates
Courtesy of the blood red romantic
Thinking he can get in my pants
With empty gestures and emptier words
And I'm a harlequin girl
I'll give him what he wants
Just cause he's my testosterone boy
And I've taught myself its what he deserves
Yet I know in my heart he's just using me
Right up till the next thing catches his eye
And then I'll be a blood red romantic
As I write the words on the wall
In her blood red stains
With her blood stained dress
To cover up the stains
His load left in the rug
And mingled with her stains
Are the new stains left by me
As I sign my final goodbye
"Happy Valentine's Day,
I got you just what I knew you'd want"
A contest entry
- Have a happy darkened valentine by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
600 points, ended February 8, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Hate Valentines Day by malevolent.
1750 points, ended February 14, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter Your Best! by Metaphorist.
600 points, ended February 7, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Use me,Screw me,but you don't fool me by ExpectingMommy18.
600 points, ended March 1, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Panic! at the disco inspired? Nice. Thanks for entering.
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Haha, this one totally reminded me of Panic! At The Disco... "Testosterone boys and harlequin girls..." I'm not sure that's what you intended, but that's what came to mind! Well done, and good luck in the contest!
Laura
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That was an intentional referance. I acctually have a poem more based off that song then this one called "Harlequin Boy" (yes I know I reversed it. I did that on purpose)
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Very intresting choice of words. I like how you took a different approach. Very unique and creative imagery! Thank you for entering.
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Another one of us
Harlequin Girl? Say no more.
Well done- really good. Made me read it over and over again.
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I'm glad you liked it!
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Wow I loved this so creepy and morbid, this is a deeply blood-red beauty I took valentine's rhymes and butchered them lol
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There are valentines rhymes??
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oooooh....yucky...lol!
There are definitely some rather unpleasant (okay, disgusting) images in the vengeful and violent piece.
Well done...good luck in the contest!
Peace,
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For once I'm glad to say, thanks for calling the imagery Disgusting. That's what I was hoping for!
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wow this is a powerful and drk write and it captured my mind in deep images well done and best of luck in the contest judging
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Thank you.
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Nicely written here. I think he might think again before he crosses your path... but wait... he is gone.
good luck.
Riftkin
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Very dark and ever so well written, however I feel it may need a spell check. Well done though. The very best of luck to you in the contest. xxxx
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I always forget that step. I ran it through the spell check!! Thank you much!!
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