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Sunset

Now
We sit,
Us alone,
Waited so long
To get where we are,
Wherever that may be.
Such a beautiful sunset.
What a beautiful waste of time.
Nothing to breathe in except for you,
And a thousand sweet dreams of what will come.

The day’s over – another end faced,
The story of such broken hard lives
That will never be the same now
That there is light amidst dark,
With the silence calling
A thousand secrets
With only me
To speak them
Out to
You.

Author notes

Peh, not the best, tried to say something and not sure if it came out at all.

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    February 7, 2008

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    Hood-Winked!

    This is a wonderful poem... I really like the shape poetry and the way you have ended in a way that is reminiscent of the beginning... Best of luck in the contest! Brilliant penning

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • tawk gold member
    February 7, 2008

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    Hood-Wink!

    Amazing write it really makes one think. Wonderful imagery and emotion within. Isn't great that we can look forward to another day? What would we do without hope I know I don't ever want to find out. Excellent write. My prayers go with you as always


  • Shamanicmusings
    February 7, 2008
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    Hood Winked

    This is a lovely poem and I like the form you have given it.


  • Lady Altheia
    February 7, 2008

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    Hoodwink

    I really liked this piece. I think it gaves it depth. I like how it contradicts inside the poem. It is different than what I expected it to be about.


  • LittleAnn
    February 7, 2008

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    Hoodwink! :)

    Beautiful, just beautiful...
    I love the form you used to express the message... There is probably much more in this write than what can be seen at first glance, isn't it?
    I think this is a excellent poem.

    Get well soon...
    You are in my thoughts and prayers...

    Annie


  • Perfectly Imperfect
    February 4, 2008

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    This is a good piece of writing, I really like what you have expressed Well done and thanks for entering x

    (Could you please write which option you chose in your Author notes please)


    • Viva La Vie Boheme
      February 7, 2008
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      I will do when I'm allowed on more. Just discharged from hosp. If I don't get a chance then fairly dq me

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