Pretending away all of her sadness,
peeling herself apart from the madness,
Counting backwards inside of her head,
she’s only a cover of a book never read.
Yesterdays gone and tomorrow is near,
but somehow today just never got here.
Nothing is right but she just can’t explain,
she’s so fucking tired of hiding the pain.
Pills lined up and stacked on the table,
even her doctor believes she is stable.
Madness is all she feels when awake,
a sad porcelain doll beginning to break.
Secrets unlocking and screaming inside,
poking and prodding a heart that has died.
Young but not foolish with heart aged in old,
she stares at blank pages of a story untold.
With unfeeling pain and a tear in her eye,
in unwritten words she says her goodbye.
A contest entry
- Choose A Phrase by piccola.
600 points, ended February 5, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Insanity by Insane-Joe.
700 points, ended December 2, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hello Jamie,
I have just finished reading your poem and wish to let you know how much I enjoyed the read.May I first congratulate you on the trophy, i can see why you got it
Your write is wonderful.A very powerful poem with alot emotion within your written words.
Take care and many beautiful blessings of love and happiness to you.
Your friend in poetry,
~Angel~
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Is abear a cub of arkbear, is he black brown or a white
maybe a golden grizzly, or just abear with some bite?
your ryhme is the best
as abear will attest
with a golden trophy nipped in the butt by your write
rudolf
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No words needed here. Superb!!
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WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!
I'm totally speechless, this was INSANE!
I absotively posolutely loved this poem.
I loved the rhyme scheme too.
Of course I'm 12 and there was a bad word in it but it really doesn't effect my opinion any.
I agree with (the below comment) completely because I can totally relate.
You've worked this piece so well, if fact you deserve a
Anyways, thanks for making my day, this was so good and I really have been touched!
Great work!
Keep writing never stop!
Doodles
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Congrats!
Somehow I missed this one earlier.. but Wow! this is amazing, very heartfelt and sad. You definitely deserved gold so congrats!!
I really like the whole rhyming thing you do, normally I do that too *only recently started not to* but it always seems to flow so much better when it rhymes. And all your wording just fit together so perfectly. If I had to choose only one part I liked the most I would say:
Yesterdays gone and tomorrow is near,
but somehow today just never got here.
Nothing is right but she just can’t explain,
she’s so fucking tired of hiding the pain.
Moreso probably because this is something I can relate to.. Always keeping pain and frustrations inside until I just cant take it anymore. Not meaning to sound depressing or anything, but its true.. You've done a wonderful job here!
Keep it up so I can read more .. *lol*
If they let me give more than three little guys I would, but three will have to do.
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Hey!
Congratulations on winning the gold! I've known you are one hot poet! I'm happy for you. -
Definitely a gold. I love your poem. And I actually liked the rhyming and it's a great read. Excellent work of title.
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Excellent poem. You really have a great flow in this poem.
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this is great and thank you for the entry
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Very deep....Great title and a great poem...Not sure where all this inspiration came from, but wow! keep it up!!
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You have a fantastic gift and talent for writing poems. In this line "she’s so fucking tired of hiding the pain." is a great use of the "F" word. I love the title of this poem as well. In fact, I have no criticism about anything. Thank you for sharing and keep on penning.
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jeeez....
You are on a roll! A book of blank pages, a story untold.
Very, very good writing here.
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