last goodbye

I say goodbye as my sun sets,
slowly, resistantly on my todays,
numbered now
by thoughts of love and pain
of happiness and heartbreak

I wait, patiently at first,
for a sign that it’s not happening
and as the evening shadows
become longer, drift further
my heart begins to weep

forgotten so quickly
the best of days and dreams
becoming as one long moment
thrown into the graveyard of sunsets
to fade away into eternity

I ask only that you acknowledge
the feelings once held between us
encompassing our hopes and dreams
sanctioning our love
caressing gently, with the force of passion

one love, one dream
we are as one, you told me
our bond unbreakable

our hearts overflowing

… now laying in pieces
as I say my last goodbye

Dee Garner
© February 4, 2008

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A contest entry

For My Teachers (5300 points) by just rob. 5000 points, ended March 1, 2008, 21 entries
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just rob
March 1, 2008
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this hurt so good...
warrior-eagle
February 21, 2008

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I love the way you write.
And I liked how you started this,
even more the way it was ended.
I don't know I felt pain yet hope
that everything would be fine.

..Simply Me♥
Night Hope
February 6, 2008

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"and as the evening shadows
become longer, drift further
my heart begins to weep"

Sighhh...I wish you hadn't written this so well & that neither of us understood it, Sweetie. Good luck in Rob's contest, my Friend. I haven't been around much lately. It's good to see you here, among so many wonderful writers (who all skeer me to pieces). Rob has impeccable taste. Wanda
cvillelisa
February 6, 2008

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Sad. Heartbreaking. I too find it hard to comment on poems like this. Makes me more sympathetic to the poet than being able to experience the poem. But I wish you healing and best in the contest.

Lisa
Nogod
February 5, 2008

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Ooohh ahh ... "and then depression set in"

I find it hard to read poems such as this. I never seem to get into the spirit (no pun intended) of it.

I guess though, you would have looked at your final draft and as you submitted it, a slight smile of completion and satisfaction crossed your face.

That's all that counts.
misticmoonlite
February 4, 2008

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aw dee this is so sad, but again there is a time to say hello again, what a first thought on this poem good luck in this contest...MM