Looking at the lifeless body
I don’t even cry a tear
Feeling relief and even thankful
After all these long years
The tub is filled to the very brim
With the red liquid of my blood
I’m looking down at the glazed green eyes
I realize I have won
I’m sorry If I betrayed you
I never wanted this life
Its true that I killed myself
For this is my suicide
Remember the time we spent together
Because it made me whole
I will love you for all eternity
For you I’m thankful
Author notes
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A contest entry
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Comments
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This is an incredibly sad write and written from an impressive point of view. Well done! So many suicide poems are so bleak and despairing. You have ended yours with a powerfully positive note. I thoroughly enjoyed your verse. Keep your pen to the page and thanks for entering!
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Not to sound weird or anything, but this poem did give me the chills. It seems almost like a suicide note written in poetry form and it's good (not that I'm condoning suicide or anything like that) but it seems like you're saying good bye to this one person or the person whose POV you wrote it from is saying good bye to this one special person.
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