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Cocaine Harmony

This bloodied heart is breaking,
These painted eyes cry.
I shatter with every choice he's making,
Sit back and wonder why.

Disappointed yet again,
Mother why did you fall.
It'll be fine you say, but when,
When will we have it all.

Life is a song,
Cocaine a  harmony.
Fighting to stay strong,
Longing to be free.

Left in the dust,
I try to rise above.
Faith begins to rust,
Still I fight for love.

I know one day we'll be okay,
Somehow we'll overcome this.
I'll stand by you the entire way,
Through all the pain and darkness.

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  • HuNNiEbOO
    May 13, 2008
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    THiS VERY BEAUTiFUL
    YOUR WORDS WERE USED TO PERFECTiON
    [KEEP UP DEE GREAT WORK]

  • mmook
    March 18, 2008

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    through all the pain and darkness comes life a song is deal with coke addiction go thru bad then comes the peace and harmony when kicked the habit.. thanks for well written work of art.. thanks for sharing


  • crazymomma
    March 18, 2008

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    great

    "left in the dust" what an appropriate way to put it when dealing with cocaine addiction. I really like the lines "life is a song cocaine a harmony" This is wonderful.

  • Page Deleted.
    March 18, 2008
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    This bloodied heart is breaking,
    These painted eyes cry.
    I shatter with every choice he's making,
    Sit back and wonder why.

    Life is a song,
    Cocaine a harmony.
    Fighting to stay strong,
    Longing to be free.

    Beautifully penned, especially the two stanzas above which really stood out to me.

    - behind.blue.eyes

  • DarkRomantic113
    February 20, 2008
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    You've painfully captured the noble truth all romantics seek. Well-written.


  • foreverxnow
    February 6, 2008

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    O.0 wow!!! this is sooo awesome. very deep and thought-provoking. i like the rhyme and the word choice. nice write!


  • thekidxthestreet
    February 6, 2008
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    I know all about this. Cocaine is.....I like this poem it speaks to me.


  • Tears from within
    February 5, 2008

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    Chilling

    WoW! This is so deep. I could feel so much emtion through this when I was reading every line. I could feel the longing for love and stability and I could also feel the pain with a broken and withered heart. This is really beautifully written you have a great flow. I love that you say that life is a song and cocain a harmony. I really like that you have that in there it is metaphorical and that really stood out to me. Wonderful write and I wish you the best and hope that it isn't true. If so then you ust hang in there and learn from what you see. And remember darling what doesnt kill you will only make you stronger. I truely love your poetry and hope that you keep up the good work. I believe that youi could make your own book and seal it so well. You are an amazing poet and I hoep that you truely see how talented you are. Keep writing hunnie. Best of luck to you in the contest!!!
    ~Amanda Fay~
    A.K.A Tears from within


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    February 4, 2008

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    Beautiful :)

    I always admired and enjoyed your dark style poetry except for the ones which dealt with hurt becaus eit just mad eme cry but I like this one. you go into the world of cocaine and yet write it in such a way that makes sense to alot of us. any ways very well penned all round and a very enjoyable read. keep up the good work


  • angelcalled666
    February 4, 2008
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    Lovely, lovely..

    I like it alot..
    Good luck in the contest
    Thank you for entering..

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