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Goddess Of The Moon

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Goddess Of The Moon



Arisen from her dream-soft bed
Light bathes her through her silken gown
No impure thought within her head
A flowered crown

The goddess of the moon by night
Lost there among her thoughts and dreams
Radiant in the morning light
In golden beams

Her silhouette against the sky
Flesh warmed by summer's gentle heat
A beauty to the naked eye
A love complete
 
 
 
 

 

 

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A Sapphic Ode in honour of Sapphos who lived on the island of Lesbos.

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  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    August 5

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    Oh my what a winner get with a random shot. Hello Sis

    Pure brilliance, Sapphics and the moon couldn't fail to win me really

    Hugs

    jem


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 7, 2008
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    pure beauty

    Luvit!

    (may I beg for a sequel where she gets hot and nasty and totally perfect?)


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 13, 2008

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    Sapphically sapphic
    Simply beautiful and perfect for the painting, you people haven't made this easy to judge.

  • ecrivain01
    June 10, 2008

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    Nearly perfect ...

    but you might want to add an apostrophe here:

    Flesh warmed by summers gentle heat (summer's)

    otherwise, it IS perfect.


  • just mercedes gold member
    May 30, 2008
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    Lovely, flowing write with beautiful images.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 29, 2008

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    Beautiful. Simply pure and beautiful. ~Pamela


  • NeonRose
    May 29, 2008
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    Lovely write! Beautiful images entwined in flowing verse.


  • Panda-Bear09
    February 7, 2008
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    Wow This was great. Wonderful imagery. Thumbs up!


  • Irish Heart
    February 7, 2008
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    very beautiful! great write

  • FordGirl
    February 7, 2008
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    Neat, you did a really good job , i enjoyed it.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 7, 2008

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    Very effective. I like this very much, although I think the third line of the second stanza is weak because of not being equal to the corresponding lines in other stanzas. The language is lovely, and the sentiment too. Well done. You get three claps for this.

    I have long been an admirer of Sappho, and once wrote a reply to a long-lost, newly-rediscovered poem of hers. You may like to check out this column on Sapphic poetry:
    http://allpoetry.com/column/show/2337109

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 6, 2008

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    stunning writing and seems to be as light as a feather...I also looked at the last line of each stanza and was delighted to find a little poem within a poem:

    A flowered crown
    in golden beams
    a love complete Love, Lane


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    February 6, 2008
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    hes silhoutte has warmed and romanced me . another great work well done kitty xx


  • Legend silver member
    February 5, 2008
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    Excellent piece


  • arafura gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    "Flesh warmed by summers gentle heat..."

    Very smooth and draws the reader in. Good luck in the contest!


  • Puppydog gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    This is such a soft and touching read. One can't help but feel love and beauty in your words.

  • Bad Bill
    February 4, 2008

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    I don't think Sapphic odes are meant to rhyme, but who cares? As far as I'm concerned, your poem is flawless. The rhyming, flow and wording show the sure touch of a true poet. An excellent piece.

    Bill


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    Once again

    Another awesome poem. Everything i have read that you have written has been incredable and this poem is no exception. Your words paint the picture in ones mind without even having to true. The mark of a true poet. Great job.


  • moonbumps silver member
    February 4, 2008

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    Beautiful and mezmerising...loved the pic too, dreamy write this and so soft in imagery.
    Good luck with this babe. xxx


  • Rinoasis
    February 4, 2008
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    I love the title! And I really liked this part:

    "Arisen from her dream soft bed
    Light bathes her through her silken gown
    No impure thought within her head
    A flowered crown"

    Then I also loved the mention of golden beams.. so poetically beautiful! Gives me a radiant feeling.

    Thanks for entering my contest!

    Blessings,
    ~Moonchild


  • Amera gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    This is pure beauty in rhyme, meter and image. You shouls be very proud of this. I found it a joy to read and to re-read. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera♥

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