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The Grand First Born, Lowly Last Born, and the Motherfigure


I think the Motherfigure’s lost and just don’t know it
She turned around and old age sneaked up on her
She turned around and her little ones were now grown
no longer little and in the Motherfigure’s control

The first born did the Motherfigure wrong
Tried to disgrace her to her very face
told the Motherfigure that
she was a bad Motherfigure
that all the choices the Motherfigure made were wrong
And that the Motherfigure was failure in the first born’s eyes

Then began the works to cut Motherfigure
off from her own Motherfigure
The Motherfigure’s Motherfigure
Vowing that she’ll never lay eyes on her again
The first born began to horde the Motherfigure’s Motherfigure’s
earthly possessions
stealing everything she could
told no one of her unscrupulous deeds
But everyone knew
but could not prove
her wrongs

The first born says
“It is all done for the care of our Motherfigure’s Motherfigure
who will leave us soon”
I know 7 years and 9 decades strong
Motherfigure’s Motherfigure
was in good health for a woman living in the land of the sun
and only became sickly once arriving in the Apple
and how come on one can come and see her?

The first born would bring
the Motherfigure’s Motherfirgure from the land of the sun
To the city that never sleeps
Knowing that the cold will eat away
at the Motherfigure’s Motherfigure’s old bones

Of all the scorn the Motherfigure faced
She still tries to please the first born
So the Motherfigure made the first born
grand in the eyes of the Motherfigure
The Motherfigure gives everything she has, the last bits of wealth
and the most important thing in the Motherfigure’s nation
Information, information about the Lowly Last Born
To gain the attention of the now Grand First Born
At the very cost of her soul

The praise and giving of the Motherfigure
makes the Grand First Born prideful and boastful
Of all the things that she has done
behind everyone’s back
and out of their seeing eyes

The Grand First Born
washes the faces of others
Making them feel shame that
They do not measure up to where
The Grand First Born thinks she is
She says they are not as good as she
who has the high paying job
the houses
the cars
the nice husband and child
You are no good in the Grand First Born’s eyes

I, the Lowly Last Born warned of such things
Told the Motherfigure that it will not end well for her
if she continues the dangerous game of trusting the Grand First Born
But the Motherfigure did not listen
And began to treat me like a Lowly Last Born
The Motherfigure says that I have no clue
of the inner workings of the Motherfigure’s nation

So I am contended to being
the
Lowly Last Born

And when it is time
The Motherfigure
She’ll turn her back to me
once again

After the Grand First Born child
Makes a bid for Motherfigure’s attention
by telling her what all Motherfigure’s like to hear
The Grand First Born’s princely spoiled son asks
for his Motherfigure’s Motherfigure

But I will be here
Waiting
As I always been
As I promised her so long ago
Waiting for my beloved Motherfigure’s return

maybe one that day she'll see I'm grand too

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  • Hetha gold member
    February 7, 2008

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    Emotional and deep. The metaphor is this is strong and cuts to the bone. I feel the pent up resentment and lessons to be learned. A wonderful piece overall. A bit of revision, could be done to add strength and vitality to your piece. I could suggest if few things, that may help you tidy it up, if you desire to do so. Just IM me, and I would be glad to help you.
    ~Peace and Be Blessed,
    ~Hetha

    • Hetha gold member
      February 13, 2008
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      This has improved greatly, since the first time I've read it! Great job! I'll probably have to read this again a couple more times, to give you any more feedback and help...
      (I've had to absorb a lot lately..)