Each night, the glowing moon rides in the sky
and gilds the earth below with silver sheen;
while overhead the stars decline to try
to match the peerless orb's effulgent gleam.
The lamp of Heaven, shining ever bright
and guiding lovers gently to their trysts,
will softly light the path through darkest night;
its beam will clear the way of fog and mists.
The lovelorn tell us this, but do they lie?
Is love itself a work of alchemy,
an answer to our soulful, plaintive cry,
or is it just a blatant calumny?
I do not care, but this I know and feel--
the moon is not my guide, but love is real.
A contest entry
- For all Sonneteers by masterblaster.
1000 points, ended February 19, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent control of sound, image (including quatrains/couplet for structural and thematic movement), language, rhythm, and rhyme. Each word falls naturally into position, yet the final effect is of carefully guided artifice (a positive word in this context) leading to meaning. Everything comes together in this piece. Congratulations.
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Excellent debunking of an overused cliche. The language is colorful, the image meaningful and the interjected humor is a nice spicy touch. Well deserving of the trophy.
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Hi, this is a lovely sonnet, a pleasure to read, Di
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The moon is known to stir the lunatic
And guide the werewolf on his nightly prowls
Her light may also make lovers lovesick
If they can stand the Tom's nocturnal yowls
So if the moon can raise and lower tides
Perhaps it pulls the liquor in our veins
Makes men seek out Dianas to be brides
And fills the lovers' hearts with sweetest pains
I must agree though, that such old wives' tales
Although romantic, are devoid of proof
And poets weave the canvas of love's sails
With words for warp, and images for woof
Speaking of woof, dogs love the moon as well
There's one next door who likes to give it hell.
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Wow... Excellently done. Incredible imagery and you (too) managed to take me away from my home of glass, bricks, steel and automobiles. Lately, I've been numb to "love" or the idea of it. But I AM still a romantic at heart. So for those who find it, good for them! LOL Enjoyed the read, my man. Thanx for sharing. Good luck and God bless.
Dez
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Masterfully done ...
for the masterblaster
. She may give you gold, ye know?
Be blessed and be well.
Love
Myra
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A lovely piece Bill there's a very gentle feel flowing through the whole piece loved this one excellent vocab as well well done to you with this one
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Love? It's all in the heart This is lovely work Bill you old romantic.I enjoyed reading it very much. Excellent rhyme and meter. Well done.
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bard of love
Wondeful argument in a sonnet , to put bard to love ,
to defend its altruism; a knight's weave.. sonnet..good luck in contest.
Sorry about the mistake ..it is a sonnet indeed ..
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really good
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