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Perspective

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Storms stomp into February,

bombard, with their sweltering boots,

hail upon cliff-dwellers' roofs.

 

Outside pile gray upon gray cloud trembling

with thunder and forked lightning

over this green, green Range.

 

And families cower in homes, marvel at natur

in conflict with itself
or war themselves over the petty and finicky.

 

Weather has had this effect since we sheltered

in caves from lions and wolves.

It is good to air the family linen

 

in sunshine after rain;

breathe afresh below an arching blue sky;.

gauge distant mountains and sight again the sea. 

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Author notes

The 'Range' is where I live; the Blackall Range, Southern Queensland.

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  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    February 19, 2008

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    classic

    This is a wonderful poem. I like the way it is broken into chunks of meaning by the stanzas you use and I like the spacing of your lines into meanigful phrases.

    It also has an unusual theme, which I appreciate.

    I can sense the feeling in this well written poetry.


    • Lyndon gold member
      February 19, 2008
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      Richard

      Thank you. In fact, I came back and trimmed this poem. Like a car mechanic, always tinkering.


  • micol
    February 5, 2008

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    I don't read as much of your work as I would like...and each time I do, I'm impressed anew. Strong sense of image, language, rhythm, structure--all working toward communicating complex ideas powerfully yet indirectly. The opening lines are a thunderstorm; the middle lines keep us huddling together; the final lines open the world back to us. Beautiful


  • Sandal
    February 5, 2008

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    I know that cranky feeling, when anything is good meat to bicker over. Great images here, the poem makes a good point, we do feel better after the storm has washed things clean. There is a metaphor in that too. Too bad when people don't put their linen out.


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    February 4, 2008
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    We get snow boots here. We got over 12 inches of snow dumped on us on Thursday night. We had a snow day on Friday.


  • klassy lassy
    February 4, 2008

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    Lyndon, you could have written this about the place I live. Mother Nature is certainly flouncing about in storm boots and throwing tantrums lately, right down to the lightning, thunder, and hail storms. Afterward, the air feels like life itself, to breathe clean.

    As for families, mine wars often enough to make me search for meadows far, far away. Television could be banned, as far as I'm concerned.

    I so enjoy your writing!


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 4, 2008

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    It is good to air the family linen...
    Well done in this contest. A wonderful poem my dear friend and so admirable in language and thought. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela

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