I don't need a cliche,
Like valentine's day,
To tell you how i feel.
but..
incase i haven't been total clear,
I'd like to be honest...
Four years to this day,
You gave me a rose,
my mother one to,
For a friendship to bloom.
My heart raced when i opened the card,
only to see, a "From ya m8,"
I was in a terrible state.
I wanted so much more,
and a year had gone,
We were together and going strong.
Only you had a plan,
This girl you would meet,
Go round to her place,
Make her curl up her feet.
The day before valentines,
as it happens,
This plan was in action,
Only your friend told me to get a reaction.
I had to utter the words,
"no more, youre gone."
Four days before valentines,
And our relationship was done.
So disgusted was i,
not that day, i was mad,
but it quickly turned into,
a mood dreay and sad.
But four years on,
We're back,
A little more mature,
You learned to hold yourself
A man of great stature
It was fate that we met again
And fit into eachother's hand
Our eyes still connect
The rose is still erect
I know that i do,
i really love you
I have done, from that rose,
that was given to me
Four years ago now,
when i was fourteen
Author notes
WEll.. its sort of self explainatory..
Its about my boyfriend, i met him four years ago on my birthday, my 14th (to be precise) and we were good friends and he gave me a rose on Valentines but as a friend only. I had feelings for him though ( alittle more than friendly-feelings)
A year on, he asked me out and we were together for a while.. then he told his friend Conor that he was going to "shag this other girl on Monday" and that monday happened to be Valentine's day
I wasn't that annoyed though because he was the one who asked me to go out with him.. we went with eachother on and off for a while.. then he stopped coming out with us after he was going with my cousin.. (longgg story)
WE got back together on June past, and having been together ever since!
So i just thought i'd enter this contest, and write an "I love you" poem. But i was unable to avoid the story about valentines all them years ago!"
..hope you like it..xo!"
..xo!"
A contest entry
- Valentine's Day!!! by Andi..
700 points, ended February 13, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I've changed the style in this poem, do you think it works?
Comments
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What a lovely love story. Sometimes they don't appreciate what they had till its not there. Glad you found each other again!! Best of luck to you both. A lovely and heartfelt powem. Take care, Sandy
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THank you for your wonderful comment
it was really much appreciated
"absence makes the heart grow fonder!"
..xo
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hope you guys do well together for many valentines to come.. i liked your write.. style was unique, there are few typos "connect""each other's" and what you meant by "dreay" i dint get this quite well..
well written and i liked it.. hope the host likes it too, best of luck myfriend and happy valentines day
regards
abuyi
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awh thank you for your kind words... lol
as a personal view i think its good because i can understand it because it was me who went through everything i have written about, but on reading it again i can see my typos and must correct them, i think the style is a little unusual, i dont usually write like it, but a little change here and there will spice things up and i will also be able to get reader's point of view on which styles work and dont
thank you dear.. happy valentines to you also..xo!"
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I love the clique of valantines day, I give all my friends crap and they feel good. And I give my pretty boy crap and he gives me . . . things *dodgy eyes*
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I know drama..
i wouldnt really think of it as a drama it was a tad dramatic but.. i never realised the full of it, i mean i knew i loved him but i knew i didn't deserve to get treated in that manner, but he has explainations for what he done and blah de blah, so its all good!"
Woo.. i loved your *dodgy eyes* you had going there, yeah valentine's is nice, but i just wasn't in the mood to write such a sloppy poem, you know...
when your not in the mood... haha
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very sweet. i love the story behind it.
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awh.. thank you!"
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Oh go tell her to jump in a lake.
This is a beautiful sister dearest. I'm glad everythings all worked out for you
Inspirational to the rest of us here
~*~* Angel *~*~
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Thank you.. i went just to write a normal poem on love and stuff but i felt that i had to be completely honest cos when you think about it love isn't all plain sailing, there are a few hic-cups along the way..xo!"
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Awww too true lol
It sorta doesn't really work out with all those love poems saying how lovey-dovey they are! Find me one person who hasn't had a few hiccups and then I'll believe them
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haha.. i think the best way to kill someone is with kindness..
lol
did you ever scream at someone and want them to scream back only the smiled at you... GOD its so annoying...
(top ten most annoying things i would say lol)
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No I can't say I have (or they have) lol
But I've done it at people (the smiling thing). I sit there, and smile sweetly at them and they look like they are going to murder me
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Yip, my teacher did it to me
I didn't have my books and I had forgotten my locker key and my book was in that!
so she (Mrs Mc Lucas) sent me around thw hole school looking for this master key which didn't even exist!! I was sooo angry
when i got into her class i explained about the master key not existing
and she addressed the class about me
saying: "doesn't she always have an excuse girls?"
so i was really angry that she was bringing the class into it so i started shouting: "what do you want me to do magic it here so you can have it and blah blah!"
then she just smiled when i was finished shouting and said, "o good your finsihed please have a seat." in her annoying accent
then i sat down and did no work, i never opened my bag
and with my luck , she wsaid , "lisa are your parents coming into school or parents evening tonight?"
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OMG
how horrible!!
I would've flew more majorly at her!!
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Yes, my dad went and went crazy with me hwhen he got home and made me apologise to her!!
God it was awful, but we were alright then after it, i think we reached an understanding or something
Bad Luck, eh?!
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Oh bugger dad lol
But it's good you (sorta) worked it out after that
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You're a cliche yourself, dear.
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I'd appreciate comments written on my poetry and not on myself
if im not mistaken you don't even know me dear
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