I am here..wishing I was there.
You are my Angel across the ocean.
Since you are asleep and dreaming,
I will be bold...
If I were there right now,
I would crawl under the covers with you,
and wrap myself,
around your beautiful brown naked body.
I would explore you,
and love you everywhere;
I would nuzzle your neck,
and bury my face in your soft sweet hair.
As my hands trace your shoulders down your arms,
I would caress your breasts, slowly moving my face there;
Kissing and tasting your chest,
nibbling on your nipples one after the other…
After feeling your body respond,
and hearing you moan and sigh;
I would stop for a second, and kiss you passionately,
on your soft sexy lips and mouth.
Stealing your breath for a timeless moment,
I would return to your breasts;
Loving slowly downward, kissing your sexy tummy.
(Of course being careful not to tickle your belly-button).
I would place my hands on your curvaceous hips,
and take hold of you firmly as I go down,
to the center of your femininity,
and gently and soulfully begin to caress you.
First with my lips..then my tongue..my breath,
and my absolute adoration and love...
I would stay there until you made me leave,
but not before I feel you,
Reach that paradise where only lovers go,
and I taste your pleasure,
and feel your amazing little Asian body,
shake and shiver and collapse around me.
Then, as grateful as a man could be to be a man,
I would let go of your hips,
and your incredible firm little butt,
and move my face and mouth up to yours,
and whisper to you that I want to enter you.
I am your slave dearest Angel.
Please, be my whore...
Author notes
a poem for Gracy...
Feel free to comment..and please read my other work..
Comments
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Wow it sure got hot in here! Had to tuen the fan on my computer was steaming. lol...Very well written. I'm sure she liked it. ~Sie
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This has everything! It is sensual, cheeky, feeling, beautiful, and, er, well I need a lie down! Would love to be your friend across the ocean!
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Wow blew me away with your tantalizing poem
Sensual erotica penned in such details that are softened by the love that you seem to feel.
Really have enjoyed your words here
Best wishes
Julie
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Well damn!!! Holy erotica!!!! This was very arousing!! And I just love that ending!!
*wipes brow*
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Fantastic Imagery
That was so powerfully written, and frankly laid out, it made my heart pound. I love the way you describe exploring your lovers body. That was one bit of writing that leaves you quivering with desire. -
its great till I realized you were asking her to be you whore.
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thanks for reading..and
I wish the word "whore" in and of itself did not offend you...or others. It is used in a loving and appreciative manner..intended to give meaning to the intimate and absolute trust and desire between two lovers... I purposely chose the word in tandem with my offer to be her slave..another word which could have a negative connotation if viewed out of context... If you read her responses to the piece and her own poetry, you will see that the wonderful woman for whom this piece is penned, has no problem with my use of the word...
Additionally, and perhaps more relevant is the fact that most heterosexual men I have encountered seek the same selflessness, and willingness to please, from a lover... Alfred Hitchcock was heard to say of the inimitable Grace Kelly, that the reason he cast her in so many roles is because she had it all..she could be your mother in public, and a whore in the bedroom.
I guess in short what I am trying to say, is that being a "whore" or asking your lover to be one for you is not necessarily a bad thing...In fact, I view it as the sincerest flattery in the intimacy and privacy of the bedroom..or wherever else love decides to have its way...
All of that said, thanks again for reading and commenting.
Mat
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Very sensual with a soft touch of humor woven within. You could feel the warmth and want throughout the words...I felt like a fly on the wall..well done, thanks for sharing
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damn man. i don't ever write adult stuff, but this has got a kick to it, i felt like i was doing something wrong just reading it.
"please, be my whore"
damn!
cheers man. i'm going to go change my pants
. Rewarded 4
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Matty,
You have inspired me with your writing...As I read this poem all I could do is hold my breath, and wish my Prince is here with me!
WHOA! I'm wiping sweat of my face. I'm going to crawl now..
Love,
GRACY -
FABULOUS!!!
Matty,
I like the changes… Love it. Love it a lot
It's explosive,I read over and over:-O:-O:-O
I felt every bit of the poem from my head, through my body, and right down to my toes .It relates to my current situation, me and my PRINCE is distance apart and I’m really longing for his presence..I can’t wait to share it with him... he is brilliant,the most romantic soul to roam the Earth. He captured my heart and resides deep within my soul….
We are so in love with each other. We cannot wait to meet each other.He says he is gonna come up soon, but until then I have to wait and we have to figure this out. I love this man with all my heart and we have yet to meet. I am going to be so happy when I see his smile on his face…I’m looking forward to it… our first real hug….our first kiss... our first ....ahemmmm oh my#:-S:
Well, love is simply a feel that no one can have control over. Once it's there, no matter where or how the couple meets, love has blossoms. It's simply there. And all we can do is to be happy and cherish the love we have for each other….
How about some more poems soon huh??
Mahal na mahal kita, gihigugma ko sab ikaw!
~~GRACY~~
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...wow.
I want a cigarette soooo badly right now. Grrrr...
Love, Lane
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haha. i love you
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I like the description and passion shown ..
But theres a negative you seem to bold when you say at the end "Please, be my whore..." Too, bold in your words if it was a true love thing with this description you got it going on , my friend.good luck in my contest.
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thanks for reading..and
I wish the word "whore" in and of itself did not offend you...or others. It is used in a loving and appreciative manner..intended to give meaning to the intimate and absolute trust and desire between two lovers... I purposely chose the word in tandem with my offer to be her slave..another word which could have a negative connotation if viewed out of context... If you read her responses to the piece and her own poetry, you will see that the wonderful woman for whom this piece is penned, has no problem with my use of the word...
Additionally, and perhaps more relevant is the fact that most heterosexual men I have encountered seek the same selflessness, and willingness to please, from a lover... Alfred Hitchcock was heard to say of the inimitable Grace Kelly, that the reason he cast her in so many roles is because she had it all..she could be your mother in public, and a whore in the bedroom.
I guess in short what I am trying to say, is that being a "whore" or asking your lover to be one for you is not necessarily a bad thing...In fact, I view it as the sincerest flattery in the intimacy and privacy of the bedroom..or wherever else love decides to have its way...
All of that said, thanks again for reading and commenting. Mat
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"Stealing your breath for a timeless moment"
...is such a beautiful line, a beautiful concept...
Besides that, WOW! This is sensual, playful, made me smile, blush and yeah...
Wonderful imagery and an emotional journey of the senses...
I don't know what else to say!
♥
Michele
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Hot. Well done. The last line is not out of place in the bedroom, in fact is a compliment. Great tempo - timing is everything! and managed to be arousing without being crude. Intensely physical with lyrical love. Where do I find another like that?
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This one was penned brilliantly. You just said it... You didn't bother with any imagery or such... You had great descriptions... and just flew with them. The flow was great too...
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Hey Mat,
I think it flowed a bit better this time around. I still stand by the last line, but the revisions made it more affectionate overall. The only other thing you might want to consider is taking out some of the "Then"s. There's nothing wrong with them, but I think it would be stronger with a few less--it makes it sound a little dry-ish. Like keep the first one, take out the one after the nipple line for sure, and maybe the one after the belly button line, but that one doesnt stand out as much. Just a thought. Once again, great work, I think you are very talented. Talk to you later,
Shannon
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"I would kiss your neck, " this line doesn't need to be there because of the lines before it.
"Kissing and tasting your chest," I don't like this line, don't know why, but try rephrasing it.
"I would stop for a moment, and kiss you passionately,
on your soft sexy lips and mouth." Rephrase: I would stop for a moment and passionately place my lips upon yours... or something around there.
Very sultry and full of imagery
with love
lucidlove
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LOL...Oh Mat!!!
I never knew you felt that way about me LOL.
No all joking to aside, what would the good old irish nuns say about this?.
Well you sure did what was asked of you, its erotic and it sounds like you have that old desease called loveeee. You have it bad man, but hey enjoy!
Good luck in the contest, i bet you get the Gold.
Slán agus gra ma chara!
Dolores x
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ow-ow! This was one of the better adult writes I've read on this site--not overly crude, with enough emphasis on how you feel about her to make it special. The only thing I would do differently is change that last word. Whore just sounds so degrading, compared to all the loving names you call her. (Angel, princess, etc.) Overall though a great piece. Talk to you later,
Shannon
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*breathless*
Wow... just wow....
I do believe I blushed the whole way through, a weakness of mine is slave and master, you hit the spot... and to show love and romance and willing to please her... that was the icing on the cake...
great work...
Good luck and thank you for sharing love... *fans herself*
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Im very pleased you took the advice from lucidlove,
I do enjoy this poem more and the level of erotica has increased, sometimes you need to come out of your shell with your words, dont be shy...
Much better dollface
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Well done
When writing erotic material, it is difficult to find the right tone and the perfect balance between being cheesy and being crude. You straddle (pun intended) that line well and quickly rise to the occasion. It is clear that you take this poem in hand and gently, but firmly, guide it to a satisfying resolution.
But, seriously, this is a hot poem and steamed my glasses throughly.
Good write. Good luck.
CaliOkie
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Oh, oh... my!
Uh... um... errr... pardon me, I'll just close the door on my way out. Carry on... Say, before I leave, could you point me in the direction of the nearest icy lake? I believe I need a dip.
*heh*
What a hot write! Yeah... wow. You, you... incredibly sexy and charming Irish pal o' my mine. Your Princess is one lucky gal!
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Wow very nice poem my friend, I see your princess liked it...very sensual and lovely..great job!
Amarige
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Magnificent. Bravo!!!
I am glad that I am the first one to comment this amazing and sensual poem
I cant explain the feeling it gives me. its just so sexy it gets me in the mode:-)
it send chills down my spine....oh my!!!
You know what? My heart was racing by the end, after reading it. I had to get a quick drink of water because I was extremly too hot..hahahaa!
I pictured the whole thing in my mind as I read the words...
You have talent man, You are really a Prince!
~~Grace~~
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