Here I am.
Standing on top of the world...
Close to where you are now.
The high and the low.
I'm willing to try...
Just show me how.
I want your hand to hold.
Let's leave tonight...
We can make it,you and I.
Take a chance.
Rise above it all...
Kiss the past goodbye.
Author notes
Option 2.
Celine Dion-Taking Chances.
A contest entry
- My Last Contest on AP by Zach..
800 points, ended March 10, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Lyk it too.keep da love in motion
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This is a really sweet write.. I really enjoyed the words you've used..
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Magnificent
The verdict says it all!
simple and short yet filled with so much meaning.
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Simple yet powerful! Really liked it!
Keep up with the good writing!
peace
M. -
i like the simplicity in this write.. it sweet and imaginative
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It's simple without the common verbal diarreha (or however that might be spelled) It guides my mind to where I'm sure the poem tells it to go, and leaves the rest to imagination. A pretty sweet piece.
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A beautiful scribe on the song
Simple, but very sweet
thanks for your entry, and good luck
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sweet
Everything in life needs to be given a fair chance.
Especially something so close to the heart.
nice write.
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Love it!
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Great piece
Very well written! A really nice piece!
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Like
I like this is reminds me of a song but I can't think of what...
want your hand to hold.
Let's leave tonight...
We can make it,you and I.
I like how positive this is I don't really do positive so well...LOL The pause is very affective in the middle line, gives you time to think about the offer and then the positive re-enforcement.
well done
I Like it
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Celine Dion is one of my favorite singers, as she really sings from the soul. We all have to take chances if life, but I never look for love. I am on a spiritual journey and truly believe that once you let the past go, and learn to love yourself, love will walk right through your door. I love the form you used in this poem. Start to listen to the sounds of the earth. Beautiful verse. Best wishes in this contest!
Shana
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Wow, short yet effective. Love this.
" Kiss the past goodbye"
Thats such a line, so much said in so few words.
Brilliant!
x
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love it.
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This is lovely poem.. the emotions flow well.. I liked the mention of mountain.. Best of luck in the contest..
Love, ~ Lonely
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That's a very sweet poem. It's full of feelings yet it's so simple, but very, very good. Great job! Wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Keep writing
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Good Write
I loved the high spirted and free feeling this poem has..... Oh thanx for commenting on my poem...
Shannie
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i love the innocents of forgiving
its so magical embracing
if done properly best wishes in the contest
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O GOD yeah this is how i feel about my new love cept money and time keep dragging me down to the ground again dammit! o how i love to travel... still i liked the way you ended it because love truly does free the past from all those visits to depression and thoughts stacking up into could of should of etc... just a truer now a holy moment in the simplicity of just what is and how beautiful it truly becomes...
anyhows thanks for sharing
w cupid wishes and belguim chocolate
-jas
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superb
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Very Nice
I like this from ya beautiful. you wrote it in a very interesting way and yet it turned out to be quite a beauty. any ways a very well penned well versed well worded poem. your shifting and contrasting style from line to line flows smoothly and well I don't have much to add myself but I was semi suprised this was as short as it is but its quite well done. good luck with the contest
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