She is in the rain
misting drizzles
that clear the city's air
and thin its sidewalks
strides stretch
as straining thoroughbred
sinews and muscle
reach to gain distance
pulling over ground
leaving wake of moments,
she is in wet shirt
where coat’s top buttons
always allow blowing water
and heat from my chest muscles
rises and vents,
searched many cities and rainy days,
escaping a desk and chair, meeting, hotel
tedium or dream draining hour somewhere;
…emptiness of fingertips,
a taste missing from my tongue; defining
purpose of the next splashy step…
never finding,
it was as if only parts of her existed,
serene eyes, swaying steps,
a divine smile, an attitude;
never all there, pieces of a dream
a vision borne on winds
and rain.
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A contest entry
- always in my head by Cat.
800 points, ended February 18, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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pk- some really good images here
i think you get a bit bogged into "poetic" sounding wording sometimes- but for the most part this is quite good and i'm glad to find it here
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Oh, what a fantastic piece! Wonderful movement, and atmospheric mood throughout this. "it was as if only parts of her existed,
serene eyes, swaying steps,
a divine smile, an attitude;
never all there, pieces of a dream" , truly sad and beautiful.
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you know, I honestly have to read your poems several times, and come back to them to understand them fully (trust me...it is just me.lol)..your metaphors are really deep and this is really good, beautiful, very sensual, sometimes we dream about someone because parts of them are missing from our understanding, or they are mysterious, yes, like rain, wind..an excellent poem.
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To A Great Poet.......
Like a guardian angel she there, everywhere and in your thoughts, and visions. I love your word play and skill. You work magic with that quill of yours....novy
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Reads little bit different, but what you had in mind comes well through. A face wandering in the reality of your dream.
Nice work PK
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