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Fresh Coffee

Your love
sprinkled on a field of white
dissolves
in the morning heat
as I wake up alone
to the smell
of fresh coffee

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  • Emile
    February 4, 2008

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    good

    Your words are simple, yet so strong and layered with emotion. It flows well and holds your interest from start to finish. This poetic trip though the heart is, thought provoking, descriptive, and creative all rolled up into a beautiful poem.


  • tarcus
    February 4, 2008

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    Nice words of love unspoken best of luck hope you get a token.

    Keep writing and i will keep reading.


  • birch
    February 4, 2008

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    this put me in a place, an image, a hotel room. i woke up to the sun with this. you took me there.

    j