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shadows

Nothing to see--
just a face in the crowd.
A voice no one hears
though she's screaming out loud.

All that she longs for
is just to be seen
but until now
a shadow is all she has been.

For so long the background
is all she has known
and none of her worries
have ever been shown.

But she begs to be heard now;
too quiet, too long.
Coming out of the shadows
it's time to be strong.

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  • Lislaine
    August 19, 2008
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    nice emotional piece you have here
    luv it

  • joebbliss
    August 19, 2008
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    good poem. everything flows nicely except this line" a shadow is she has been."


  • Redeemed15
    August 19, 2008

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    Hey Stephanie! To make the poem look more professional, you should capitalize the first of each line. Great poem


  • insanely-crazy
    August 19, 2008
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    nice Job!!!


  • tarcus
    August 19, 2008

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    I would have made it more impersonal:-


    Nothing to see
    just a face in the crowd.
    A voice no one hears;
    screaming out loud!

    All that is longed for?
    just to be seen
    up until now
    just a has been.

    so long the background
    is all has been known
    none of the worries
    ever been shown.

    begging to be heard now;
    too quiet, too long.
    Coming out of the shadows
    in time; to be strong.


  • Hidden
    August 19, 2008

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    awsome, the under dog coming out, thats really cool. the rhyme and flow of the was superb, made me glad we have the same name :]]


  • misshugglebugglez
    August 19, 2008

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    oh, this is super good! I love it! Is this about someone you know? 'cuz your descriptions and wording really reeled me into the poem, and i felt bad for her. Have u seen the musical, "Chicago?" reminds me of a song in that. Very good stuff! I loved it! it was mahvelous, dahlin!

    -Peanut Butter Fudge


    • stephilou
      August 19, 2008
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      Thank you! I haven't seen Chicago but I really want to! Thanks, dahlin!


  • just weak hands
    August 19, 2008

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    absolutely wonderful
    i love it !
    if it was bad as you said it was, you certainly did an excellent job making it better ! :]

    great job :]


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    this is wonderful stephanie
    love it, its wow material
    keep it up and take care
    Stephanie ♥

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